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jave Junior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 18CO, USA |
Fling Just this morning We'd never met I'm lost within your eyes And yet… Here I am in your arms Is it you that draws me Or your charms? Am I wrong? Are we right? (I question my motives) Oh God, I'd die to hold this night Should I have, this lust denied? Or is this impulse justified? The clock ticks fast The night is gone So is our time Something's wrong… I turn around and leave you "Goodnight" Yet, somehow your smile still Holds tight We fling ourselves Falling fast Relinquishing control to the lust Which holds us vast Within it And not even the greatest of thieves Could steal just one minute |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Wow dude! Not everyone could have put that in words as elegantly as you did! Bravo! *claps* Lol! Reall though, this is an awasome poem, and though I've never had a night like that... I still say it's well written in this poem! Later! -Rich After Love comes Pain, then Love, Then Pain, then Love, then Pain..... does anyone else see a pattern here? Oh well, can't say it's not worth it. |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
This flows really well and I think this poem describes those particular feelings perfectly, well done! anya |
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