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Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

0 posted 2002-09-04 10:03 PM

Barefoot on gravel, he wanders
full-blast, half-mast but laughing.
Not a care.
Falling's potential, but then
so is the other way.
Skipping from run-in to all the other
run-down downs and roundabouts,
brothers aren't friends,
just brothers.

Shoot 'em long before they're dead
from hunger, he says--
agree or face his.
I agree and logic wins
like logic never does.

Four guitars strapped on his back,
one for each emotion
(you know, hate and love and trust
and marriage, growing like mushrooms).
Can't let those shoes melt
'cause walking's real this time.

[This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (09-05-2002 07:15 AM).]

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

1 posted 2002-09-05 04:53 AM

This is such a great poem, I just love the imagery that you have used, thank you for sharing it with us

Andrew

"I still feel the pain in my heart, what once was pure is now diluted" - Biffy Cylro

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

2 posted 2002-09-11 02:38 AM

Carly dear, you still gotta explain this one to me. I like it, even if the meaning of it flies right over my head. Love the imagery you used, and the flow is great. The wording of this is just fantastic. You really did a great job here.
Love you,
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.”

Getting away, isn't Running away.

"The hurt that you try to hide, is killing me."

LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

3 posted 2002-09-12 11:49 PM

Absolutely-freaking-brilliant! This is definately my style of poem. So here are your alms, for a job well done. Peace out!

*~Meredith~*

"I can taste you on my lips
and smell you in my clothes"
*BHS

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2002-09-13 01:29 PM

Really weird, Carly.

But I like it.
I've always thought your writing was so unique. I don't pretend to grasp and analize it, but it grabs my attention.

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

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