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BlatantlyImpossible
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since 2002-08-19
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0 posted 2002-08-19 10:52 PM


Moonlit evenings
promises of christmas presents
in August
you're telling me
you'll get me something cool
and I feel
like your obligation.

Talking to you on the phone
you promise to get in the shower
in five minutes
you're telling me
you'd like to spend time with me
and all the time I feel
like your obligation.

You tell me to trust you
but
what made you change your mind?
I'm your afterschool hobby.
Why waste your time
if I'm just an obligation.


© Copyright 2002 BlatantlyImpossible - All Rights Reserved
Kevin
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Torrington, Ct, Usa
1 posted 2002-08-20 09:49 AM


Hey,

I know your excited to be here and all but did you have to kick down our double doors with this entrance

I like this poem alot

Its a unique way to look at someone who isnt fully into a relationship anymore

welcome to the blue

I'm on my feet, I'm on the floor, I'm good to go
All I need is just to hear a song I know

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
2 posted 2002-08-21 09:19 AM


yes welcome welcome. i enjoyed this alot. i diffently agree with kevin on the entrance thing, this was a great first post.

~Ur feelings never change, u just learn 2 hide them~

BlatantlyImpossible
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since 2002-08-19
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3 posted 2002-08-21 04:27 PM


Thank you both very much.


vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26
Posts 495
East Haddam, CT
4 posted 2002-08-22 02:51 PM


This was really sad, but I could relate well.  It's tough when you feel like somebody is only being "friends" with you because they feel as if they're obligated to.  You wrote this very well.  

Always,
Nikki

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

punkrockerrobin
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Sparks, NV
5 posted 2002-08-24 04:35 AM


hunny you aren't an obligation but i know how relationships can feel like that trust me i been there. check your email

you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all

Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
6 posted 2002-09-11 10:47 AM


Great Job!  Welcome to Passions!

ich bin schwul, ich bin jüdisch und ein Kommunist dazu, Ich bin schwarz und behindert, doch genauso Mensch wie du ~Wizo

LyricFetish
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
7 posted 2002-09-12 11:44 PM


"I'm your after-school hobby." Damn. That was well put, very sad but true-to-life in some relationships. Excellent first post! Be cool.

*~Meredith~*

"I can taste you on my lips
and smell you in my clothes"
*BHS

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