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vballplaya18
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0 posted 2002-07-30 01:07 PM


I once believed
That one day you and I would be together
But that time has come and gone
In a matter of days all my hope has vanished
For the girl you loved before you do again
How foolish of me to believe
We could ever be together
Why must I always lay my heart out time after time
When each time it gets trampled
I don't blame you for anything
Your feelings can't be changed
And even though I wish they could be
I won't even try
For love is something the heart can't be forced to do
It can only fall in love
I realize I'm not the one your heart desires
But taht doesn't mean I'll stop loving you
Because, to me, you're worth the wait
Sure I'll be hurting
And of course the pain will exist
But I can overcome those and still love you and live my life
I may find another but you have forever earned a spot in my heart
No matter where I go or who I meet
You will always have that spot
And if your heart finally decides to love me
Then you know mine will love you back
But until that time
I will let things be
For fate determines destiny
And I can't change anything
So I wish you the best of luck
And I am happy for you and always will be
But just remember
You have that special place in my heart
And nothing will change that

***Kacie****


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Jenn Cirrincione
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1 posted 2002-07-30 02:07 PM


I understand the emotions behind this.
Nice work, and welcome to the blue pages.
Keep em coming for us..

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

Kevin
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2 posted 2002-07-30 03:21 PM


Hey vb
great sport by the way
but to the poem

I enjoyed associating with your feelings alot, I've definitely been there before

I hope you dont mind if I suggest maybe spicing it up a little, maybe some exteneded imagery to convey your emotions

I did enjoy it though
welcome to pip

Lady In White
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3 posted 2002-08-04 09:43 AM



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