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lil_pwheeler Junior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 39here |
THREE FINGERS She eats and eats Without a visible care No one could possibly know What she'll do in there She starts to cry She starts to think As removes her three fingers And vomits in the sink Her yellow nails Her yellow teeth No one knows her terrible secret That she hides beneath She comes back She forces a little smile Before she goes back in It will only be a while She can see her ribs Through her chest Its her shape She does detest So for the girl Be careful what you say Because that little girl Just might die some day |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Ah the harsh reality of an eating disorder. You've written about a tough topic here and done it well. Hopefully this isn't about you. If it is, sorry to hear so. Thanks for the read. ~AF~ Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me... |
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lil_pwheeler Junior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 39here |
Its not about me. Its just on the topic |
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pure_innocence Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 80Colorado, US |
You brought to light the harsh reality of bulimia. It's amazing what one will do to please the eyes of the world. More disgusting is what pleases us more, a nice body or a beautful, perfectly toned soul. Nice job, keep it up. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the topic is a hard one...brutal reality it is...you expressed it well. im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Happens much too often... And few people even realize that... I liked the poem. - Cody - |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I am very glad to hear that this is not about you. Great poetry! *Amanda* |
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fairy girl Junior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 10*~*Virginia*~* |
this poem presents real reality. good job. thanks for the read. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I agree w/ Heavens Tears- I'm glad this isn't about ya.  I thought you did a wonderful job writing about it though. Such a horribly sad topic. One I still have yet to understand...why people do this- I'll never know. Great write. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
a horrible situation to have gone through...its tough and at times fightening...you wrote this well i hope to read more from you soon...more! |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
That is a really great peice, It looks at all angles of the problem. Touching and inspiring, THANKZ, ALLIE |
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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
this is really good, i liked the flow. you chose a tough topic and did really well! laura ~*~ Be honest and don't follow fads and fashion. do what you do and do it well ~*~jon bon jovi~*~ |
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Angelwings Member
since 1999-08-27
Posts 222IL, USA |
Wonderful peom. It's sad to think that the girls of our culture are constantly trying to please everyone else's idea of beautiful. When I guarantee, they are some of the most beautiful people without the bullemia. Good way of talking about such a terrible subject. *that what does not kill us makes us stronger!* |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
*applause* I completely agree with the last stanza. Keep your head up and hang in there. That's all you can do..right? Bel "And you're my obsession |
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Starnite Junior Member
since 2001-07-05
Posts 41Wisconsin |
Great job. But that post touched me because I have got a friend that does that. But that is all true. And like everyone said it is a tough topic to write about. **Sarah  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
That last stanza was awesome. This poem really hit home. Bulimia is a serious thing... all too common among many people. It's very hard to live with. I liked the poem. Thanks for sharing it with us. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning... |
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Mykels_Angel Junior Member
since 2001-06-25
Posts 38australia |
r u meaning bulemia? yeh i know what thats like... its really bad. Its hard to get over it but if you try hard enough you suceed.. expecially if people are on your side GREAT POST!! keep up the great posting luv sarah! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a very sad poem. I really hope this isnt about you or about somebody you know....GOod luck with that.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
This piece was very well written. It is also something that young girls have to face sometimes. You expressed the topic very well. Keep up the great work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front." |
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