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will this go by unnoticed too? |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
walk walk walk she walks with her hand hanging low her hopes have been dashed she doesn't know how to see the light anymore it all seems fake to her now nothing is real she has lost hope for hope has brought her nothing only disapointments she is tired of waiting it only outlines how she feels all the hurt she feels how unspecial wanting never to be seen she doesn't know how to deal anymore how to take another scare to see one more person who doesn't care another person to show her how much she doesn't matter if she wants not to be noticed and hides it is of her will and then she doesn't have to look and see how much she doesn't seem to fit in how she is on the outside looking in she tries to fool herself she doesn't care tries to be cold hopes dreams only bring false hope disapointment when nothing happens or when you try your turned away as unimportant nothing changing except the level of respect you have for yourself or lack therefore of dreams give false hope for tomorrow but she has them anyways she wants to believe there is still a chance she knows in her heart maybe she will always be alone but it isn't the being alone that bothers her its the fact that it isn't because she wants it that way the fact that no one cares enough to be there in the end we are all alone its so hard so frightning knowing you need to trust to open your wounds only hope that you aren't taken advantage of hurt because they see the need to attack trust that there is someone out there who cares so hard to live your life that way hard not to knowing if you don't your the bearer of your own bad fate on that turn knowing if nothing happens no matter what you do asking whats wrong with me? left of that feeling of being alone will this feeling ever go? or am i doomed to feel this way forever? |
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shadowchild458 Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 117MN,USA |
...dreams give false hope for tomorrow but she has them anyways... ...it only outlines how she feels... i love those lines! they are the best out of the whole piece. great write! i loved it, i feel that way sometimes but it always evaporates...for some it never will, never can. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
this is a strong piece Scarlet. the emotions are there, but to me they were put there so coldly. Just spitting them out, gettin them off the chest... i always was a freak.. anyways I loved these lines: "nothing changing except the level of respect you have for yourself or lack therefore of" And especially this stanza: "dreams give false hope for tomorrow but she has them anyways she wants to believe there is still a chance she knows in her heart maybe she will always be alone but it isn't the being alone that bothers her its the fact that it isn't because she wants it that way the fact that no one cares enough to be there" “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
hey wow tifferz you is back have you written anything in the last little while? if you have i wouldn't mind reading it |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
hey sweetie, no i havent really been writtin anything. cant seem to do it anymore. when i do it just feels too.. forced i guess. idk.how ya been scarlet? i missed readin from you as well so keep postin hun. tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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