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Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2002-06-19 07:15 PM

A red rose rests upon a grave,
With blood upon its thorns.
No one knows who placed it there,
Or for whom the red rose mourns.

Raindrops fall in disarray,
And mingle with the blood.
They twist and writhe in little pools,
And feed the yearning bud.

Granite cracks and crumbles,
And engravings fade away.
The flower blooms and multiplies
And thrives on the decay.

The red rose slowly withers,
And the petals disappear.
Though the clouds may shift and roll,
They always fail to clear.

A child stares down at a grave,
And runs a finger o’er the thorns.
She sits there slowly wondering,
For whom the red rose mourns.

---------
Been a while, I guess....

-Adam

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

1 posted 2002-06-19 08:22 PM

it may have been a while, but your poetry is still awesome.

I love the images that i get from these, and I am still your biggest fan. PLease dont take so long to write another one

ok?

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

2 posted 2002-06-19 08:24 PM

Heh....yeah....I just don't write much anymore though..

-Adam

"I love you." 'No you don't.' "Why do you say that?" 'If you loved me, you wouldn't have to say so.'

songsoftheaftermath
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since 2002-06-19

Posts 84
a world of disarray

3 posted 2002-06-19 08:29 PM

me. the red rose mourns for me. *grins* this is pretty good adamz.
thanks for the read- you're really a good writer...no matter how long its been.

BrokenAngel
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since 2002-01-06

Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA

4 posted 2002-06-20 05:24 PM

Wonderful work. Can I ask what the inspiration for this was? Just my curiosity, but who does the red rose mourn for? Keep writting, your great at it.

~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~

Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

5 posted 2002-06-20 06:24 PM

The rose mourns for....the despondent. It mourns for the ones that will never be able to pull themselves up above the clouds... It mourns for the downcast, the downtrodden, the denounced, and the disheartened...

-Adam

Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

6 posted 2002-06-20 07:53 PM

Beautiful. Truly. I loved the poem itself and what it's meaning is.

I like to wander graveyards and I always "talk" to those who are gone. To those who are nameless and forgotten. I'm not sure why. I'd like to think I know them. I know your poem wasn't entirely literal (or at least I don't think it was) but that's what it made me think of at first. *shrugs*

"The rose mourns for....the despondent. It mourns for the ones that will never be able to pull themselves up above the clouds... It mourns for the downcast, the downtrodden, the denounced, and the disheartened..."
I'm glad that not everyone has forgotten them....

Thank you for posting this. I really enjoyed it.

[Jaime]

"I think I would like to call myself 'the girl who wanted to be God'." Sylvia Plath

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (06-20-2002 07:55 PM).]

Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

7 posted 2002-06-20 08:13 PM

*shrugs* Literal, figurative, in the end it's all the same. Perhaps it was both literal and figurative at the same time.

-Adam

"I love you." 'No you don't.' "Why do you say that?" 'If you loved me, you wouldn't have to say so.'

ericaisamonkey
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since 2002-04-04

Posts 51
A little town north of nowhere

8 posted 2002-06-20 08:31 PM

this is beautiful. I'd have to say it's one of the best poems I've read (no offense to anyone). It makes me wonder about a lot of the things that effect society. I don't think I can explain it as well as I'm thinking it, but this poem kind of in an indirect way talks about how life and people are today. I enjoyed the read, and I'll be looking for more of your stuff (even if it is a little older) the longer it takes to write something the better it should be. You did wonders with time. great job

*Erica* :loveya:

BrokenAngel
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since 2002-01-06

Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA

9 posted 2002-06-20 08:50 PM

Dark Enchantress said it best. All I can do is agree with her on remembering the unsung.

~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~

LoneWolf
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

10 posted 2002-06-20 09:10 PM

Wow this was awesome. i loved this. great job here.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

11 posted 2002-06-20 10:56 PM

*hugs* Beautiful write, dude, beautiful write.

HVNsnt82086
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since 2001-06-05

Posts 30
United States

12 posted 2002-06-21 02:05 AM

It seems like the the only things I could say would be exactly what everyone else already has...but still, I wanted to reply, because it really is a beautiful piece. Excellent job!

Passion. It lies in all of us. Sleeping, waiting, and though unwanted, unbidden, it will stir. Open it's jaws, and howl. It speaks to us, guides us.

chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

13 posted 2002-06-21 03:11 PM

Kosetsu-

"A red rose rests upon a grave,
With blood upon its thorns.
No one knows who placed it there,
Or for whom the red rose mourns."

Great opening. I have nothing to say about this first stanza or the last. I liked the way the first and last stanzas were similar so bring closure. Beautifully placed words, and wonderful imagery throughout. My only critique would be the first lines of the third and fourth stanzas:

"Granite cracks and crumbles,"
and
"The red rose slowly withers,"

respectively. The meter seemed to change suddenly, and so it was a bit hard to follow and disrupted the flow. Perhaps you could reword it or add an extra word?

Other than that, a very well written piece! Glad to see you writing again, Adam!

Leah

Faerie Lick
New Member

since 2002-06-21

Posts 9
Curious, so curious

14 posted 2002-06-21 03:14 PM

What can I say that hasn't been said before?

I promised myself that I wouldn't turn my back on anyone.

I mourn with the rose.

Thanks. It was beautiful.

Hey, look at me.

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

15 posted 2002-06-22 03:04 AM

Just like I said to Leah---it "being awhile" doesn't mean ANYTHING! You're STILL as good as ever! Dude!!! I ENVY you!!!

I've always loved your dark composure!

cutiepiesugarbabie
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 110
A Cloud In the Sky

16 posted 2002-06-24 12:07 PM

*bump*

o*~Everyone makes mistakes-get over them and make more tomorrow!~*o

DancinQueen

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since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

17 posted 2002-06-24 11:47 PM

Oh I've missed your stuff so much. You have been and always will be one of my favorite poets in teen. This was beautiful, but yet dark and mysterious. I always love your posts and most of the time I can't even explain why. its pittiful, so just know that even though i might not say much sometimes im thinking more than i can say.

keep up the great work

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

18 posted 2002-06-25 05:01 PM

I am loving it.
The imagery is great.
I really enjoyed reading this
the flow was done very well.
Thanks for posting it.
I know what you mean...
I don't write much anymore either..

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

Tomer
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since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

19 posted 2002-06-28 02:21 PM

Impressive Adam...your imagery paints a picture for me that is dark yet beautiful. Keep up the good work. Continue writing, you will only get better.

Winston Froom
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since 2001-11-28

Posts 32

20 posted 2002-06-28 04:30 PM

Well sir, you've managed to take something which was Ernest Hemingway's and made it your own. This is not a negative critique, for Hemingway himself managed to take something which was John Donne's and made it his own. Until next time.

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

21 posted 2002-06-28 09:07 PM

Hemingway's? Do tell...if it resembles a Hemingway writing, then I can only be flattered. I honestly had no idea of any similarity. Hemingway is not a writer I've read much of.

-Adam

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

22 posted 2002-06-29 11:20 AM

wow, i REALLY liked this one. great job

~i kept the right ones out and let the wrong ones in~ Aerosmith~

Jessica

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since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

23 posted 2002-06-30 02:53 AM

Oh my god... Adam? Is it really you? *runs and dives into your arms* I have missed you soooo much (and your writing and your friendship and, umm... everything)!! Please... if I did anything to make you stray away please forgive me. You know I have had a bumpy road and I didn't mean to drag you down with me. I am better now... honestly I am. I got the help I have always needed and I know how to live now... in the present, not the past. I know this isn't the place to make up for lost time so I will finish this up. I hope I get to talk to you on yahoo but if not just reply here. I love you, Adam... that is one thing that hasn't changed. *hugs*

~Jessica

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

24 posted 2002-06-30 06:32 AM

hey sweety great writes you come up with. hey did you ever draw that pic? if not tis ok don't worry bout it. glad to see ya hun.
love ya!
robin

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Voiceless
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since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

25 posted 2002-07-01 12:36 PM

Geez i still love it!

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

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