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lilibeelee
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since 2001-07-12

Posts 143

0 posted 2001-07-13 11:03 PM

I know your lieing
So stop this denying

I know the truth please dont lie
I can't do anything but wonder why?

Iam so frustrated so unsure so confused
I dont want to be another girl that you use

So much that I know but i just cant say
I dont understand why or how it has to be this way

I just lie to myself like you lie to me
I pretend to be fine alright, and happy

How can you lie and pretend for so long
How can you lie and not think that it's wrong!

I dont know what I should do
I love you, and I don't want to loose you

I have been lied to in the past
And been told, "baby what we have is gona last"

Only to find out that it was all just a game
I thought you were differnt from them, your not your the same

I don't know why Iam still here
You lied to me and cheated on me its all so clear

Iam still here lieing in my heart
A small part of me knows the right thing to do is to be apart

I can't do this I cant take it anymore
The pain lingers on like a bruise or a sore

Iam so stupid for thinkning my heart can take this pain
My tears wont stop, its constint like rain

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

1 posted 2001-07-14 01:17 AM

I liked this alot, lilbee.
You expressed your thoughts well.
The rhyme scheme was nice too.
Keep posting.
I really enjoyed this.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-07-14 03:13 AM

the imagery was well expressed with your thoughts..i liked it

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-14-2001).]

~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

3 posted 2001-07-14 01:01 PM

hey great one. i like the message. try watching your syllables in each couplet and try to keep them about the same. it would make the flow much easier.... but soon the constant rain of tears will come to an end and you'll see that no man is worth your tears. and the one who is won't make you cry!

Valerie

"...And i want to take you down, but your soul could not be found, doesn't matter much you see cause your disease is killing me..." -Saliva

CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

4 posted 2001-07-15 01:28 AM

I liked this. The rhyming was good, and the imagery was also well done. Good write.

- Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-07-15 05:01 AM

I enjoyed the poem. I especially liked the ending. Well done here.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-07-16 10:36 AM

The ending was very well done. I enjoyed this a lot, lilibeelee. I liked the way you used couplets throughout the poem... nice work.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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