Made it - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Teen Poetry #5

Made it

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2002-06-12 03:40 AM

No more asking for the cane,
Hopeless this life with limited
Emptied view created subtonic
Chronic balzin as I keep on slanging,
Banging down twenty four
War, missiles, murder
Mess created, defeated,
Elevated, shifted, down right graded,
Faded, weeded, sacred, submitted,
Fool proof, obligated, while you shaded,
Deranged, rage, cage blaze,
Freed, dilated, unaided,
Made it in the end.

Ronil (A mask for everyday. Imagine a life without them.)

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2002-06-12 03:42 AM

This took me on a trip. I really loved the way it was written. Kept me on the edge of my seat, and the ending was superb. This poem was awesome, really.

This message has been brought to you by the letter 'Y'

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

2 posted 2002-06-13 01:11 AM

Thanks for your reponse. Dopey Dope.

Ronil (A mask for everyday. Imagine a life without them.)

[This message has been edited by Xeonox (06-13-2002 01:12 AM).]

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.