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Demonic Illusion
Member

since 2002-02-07

Posts 50

0 posted 2002-04-29 06:11 PM

Your world is a scary place,
Ready for war boots to lace.
Now that you've woken up the demon in me,
Roll the dice my strength of invincibility.
This is what lies inside of pain,
This is inside my brain.
Unstoppable force of darkness and hate,
Makes me smile when you take the bait.
City of Dreamless Ruins built in a cage,
Let loose and fear most my rage.
Deep inside a heart that doesn't bleed,
Inside pain of a heart I don't need.
Darkness is rising and growing,
All this done without you knowing.
Conquer an entire city,
Do it without pitty.
Devilish ways inside me,
Untouchable Darkness you can see.
This lives Inside....of me

Demonic Illusions, Frostic Dragons, Bloody Tears From Me To You....all surround by a force of Untouchable Darkness

dastard
Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 55
in tearing silence

1 posted 2002-04-30 12:38 PM

*shudders* ..uhh.. that was really good! I especially liked the image of having a heart you don't want.. great write!

"Pain doesn't hurt when it's all you've ever felt" ~Marie, the girl of a thousand truths

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

2 posted 2002-04-30 07:51 PM

Whatever I want.

Seriously, man, I enjoyed this piece. It was very.... real. The first two lines especially:

"Your world is a scary place,
Ready for war boots to lace."

And then I also loved these two as well:

"Now that you've woken up the demon in me,
Roll the dice my strength of invincibility."

And the ending as well... pukka.

A smashing write, my friend.

Sincerely,
Titus

Every second that passes you are one second older. You'll never get that second back.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2002-05-01 11:33 AM

WOW this was dark hun..but i enjoy a dark poem on a sunny day

Thanks for sharing!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-05-02 01:33 PM

Wow. Enjoyed.

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2002-05-07 04:28 AM

Demonic Illusion-
A dark and very powerful piece.
Extremely well penned!
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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