Teen Poetry #5 |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl ![]() |
Offering up my heart, to you. Once again- I'm hooked. I love you- and I'll love you till the end. ~(And then I'll find someone sweeter)~ My heart will change- conforming yet again. Looking for- what's never there. Crying myself a river, because I thought you were the one. The piece that fit- thought you could... change my mind. Alas the distance swells some more, and the drift does grow. Our hearts are now- so far apart. And all I do, is swear it still: I'll love you till the end. . . . . . .The End. |
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Impulse Pro Junior Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 25Mass,USA |
Good poem !! I like your writting style |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Great poem!! It had a lot of strong emotion in it. I thought you did a wonderful job ![]() iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
LOL, I read your critique message and laughed, then I forgot what I was going to say and had to read the poem again... I'm so absent minded... Anyway... I loved the poem. You use punctuation well. I'm sorry, that's an awful thing to say... The poem was excellent, the feelings were well expressed. I liked the ending. ![]() It reminded me of someone I used to know... *sighs* ![]() Kielo I LOVE YOU! *kisses you* hehehe... |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
LOL Thank you all. Glad my punctuation was appreciated. ![]() "I can't get you out of my head- your love is all I think about." |
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PoetryIsLife![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
"Offering up my heart, to you. Once again- I'm hooked. I love you- and I'll love you till the end." Hey Jenn. ![]() I liked it. It was definetly (sp?) different, from you, and from anything I've read. The style was just... unique. The "until I find someone sweeter" threw me for a loop. It kind of, for me, thew of the entire feeling of the poem. As if... all the sadness and love you were feeling was fleeting. Anyway, I enjoyed the write. ![]() Sincerely, Titus Every second that passes you are one second older. You'll never get that second back. |
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tzaddiqim Junior Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 15 |
That is a really good poem! I felt i coudl totaly relate to it and the feelings you expressed were very simular to thoes which i myself am going through. Great Write! |
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Tamma![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Wow - Once again - this reminds me of my ex Justin Michael...(Or, mabbe I just have him on the brain)...either way...great poem ~ Tamma Have you ever heard that "No shirt, No shoes" rule? My question is...Why doesn't that rule include pants? |
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Lisa_bebe15 Member
since 2001-11-15
Posts 151Florida |
wow this is good..Yea it reminds me of my x..hum.. Lisa Ann "Water Over Matter" |
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