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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2002-04-21 01:29 PM

Somebody, please help!
I think I might drown!
Throw me a life vest or something,
'cuz I keep sinking down.

all these emotions,
are making my head spin.
Like a thousand needles,
all piercing my skin.

So much pain and frustration,
It makes me want to shout.
I don't know what to do,
all my thoughts are shrouded in doubt.

I want to call for help,
only noone's there to call.
I jumped of the pier,
and took the great fall.

Plunged deep into the icy waters,
They feel none of the pain I do.
I think I'm gonna drown,
If I don't soon talk to you.

I love you with all my heart,
you're one of my truest devotions.
But we're in all this together,
stranded in a sea of emotions.

~Mi dayz r cold without u, but I'm hurtin while I'm with u, I Know mi heart can't take no more I keep on running back to u...~Ashanti

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2002-04-22 11:30 AM

Aww hun i wish i could help you but it seems like you 2 are the only ones who can help yourselfes....awesome write! you really put a lot of emotion and feeling into it. Great job

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

2 posted 2002-04-23 02:54 PM

"So much pain and frustration,
It makes me want to shout.
I don't know what to do,
all my thoughts are shrouded in doubt."

Those last two lines.... how true! Many a thing we do, we have to take risks, look at the pros, cons, and the whole picture, and take risks.

"I love you with all my heart,
you're one of my truest devotions.
But we're in all this together,
stranded in a sea of emotions."

Killer last two lines, my friend.

To me, though, that is an encouragement. At least you have her there, with you. Some don't even have that. I hope things work out for you two, mate.

Sincerely,
Titus

The ultimate measure of a man is not where he stands in moments of comfort and convinience, but where he stands at times of challange and controversy.

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

3 posted 2002-04-25 05:47 PM

I love how u write poems like dat! geeeze um..u know exactly how to capture someones attention! Ur endings are always so good..it gives me a good surprise! keep writing!!..mogo! lol all mi love ~Jess

~*~Never take anything for granted~*~

Impulse Pro
Junior Member

since 2002-03-22

Posts 25
Mass,USA

4 posted 2002-04-25 06:01 PM

I like this poem!
keep them coming

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

5 posted 2002-04-25 08:04 PM

thanks 4 the replies, i appreciate all of them..

~if you want me to fall for you, you gotta give me something worth tripping over~

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