Teen Poetry #5 |
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Lost in Forever Slumber |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
Twenty minutes ago I left your house You didn't even notice did you? You probably still haven't noticed I left Now a half hour past... You certainly haven't followed. All you want to do is sleep You make me asking to do something Sound like the end of the world. Fine have it your way Stay in bed all day, I won't even bother to ask you anymore To join in the things I'd like to do, Or bother to tell you what's going on in my life Because I know what the response will always be. Have fun sleeping your life away Maybe when you wake up you'll care But who knows when that'll happen And who knows if I'll still be there. |
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Android 18 Member
since 2002-02-20
Posts 61Austrailia (My DreamLand) |
I really like this poem. Great job! ![]() "I just want revenge. Is that so wrong?" |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
enjoyed the read Mistic... thanx4sharing... *~coco~* |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Nice job on the poem. I know a few people like that. Better to just give up on it, they don't wanna try, neither do you after awhile.I'll quit talking now Jon "Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I liked this a lot..if you asked my BF he would say i was a lot like this...i sleep too much mostly cuz im depressed and its the only time i can really feel safe is when i sleep..but who knows...hope things get better between u 2..maybe you guys need to talk about it all iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Awesome poem. The ending was really good, something about it just sounded right. I think it was the rhyme. (Remembers that she doesn't normally like rhyme, and is confused) Ok, now that I've confused myself, I'm going to go now... ![]() Kielo |
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