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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
read and reply honestly, thanks ppls. -fear- in this world of broken love emotions kill but so do you and i'm so sick of your stupid lies that i am ready to die why must you always do this? the only thing i've learned from you is how to cry well screw you cause i give up sick of your crap and your frequent lies you say you love me but it's "not enough" then you have the audacity to try to make me feel sorry for you well cry me a river cause i can honestly say that... i no longer care about you -fear- this poem is dedicated to justin, who on this very day, has smashed my heart into bite sized pieces. "I know the pieces fit cause i watched them fall away"--TooL |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow that was really powerful, I thought it was a great read... Hope things get better soon  Andrew |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Woah. That was great. It was sooo powerful, and full of anger and emotion. I can honestly say that I have felt this way before, and basically spoken these same words to that person. You'll get through this I'm sure. Just smile! (Easier said than done huh?) *~*Amanda*~* I need more time to find the real me. to fly like the birds, to be set free. Why couldn't I stop until I had died? It was hate for myself hidden inside. [This message has been edited by Heavens Tears (edited 06-25-2001).] |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
 WOW Fear! I loved this sooo much! The Anger is so powerful. Man have I been there before. Amazing write here! It's times like these that I damn myself for not ever making a library. Keep posting Fear!You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
If you don't mind, I have one for you.....I can completely understand how you feel......I'm sorry, and if you want an ear, just email me ok? All The Lies ~SEA They say true love never dies but what about all the lies All the lies that I thought true all the lies that came from you All the lies that broke my heart all the lies is why we're apart They say true love never dies guess they didn't hear all the lies 1988 I just wanted to share that with you.....hope you don't mind ~SEA |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Tough situation... I'm sorry you're going through this, and I hope you can find it in you to get through this, stronger than you were before. The poem was very good. The line about dying alarmed me a little. If you really feel that way, then please seek prof. help. Nice work. Enjoyed, as always. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Anger is powerful and it workes for you this is a wonderful poem very well done and to Sea --> now why you have to be like that you needs to post it where more people can see it I loved it. Until your next poem fearing-laughter-- Linc "Blood Moon" |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
I like this poem cuz I can connect with it on so many levels. I have been there and done that!! *hugs* I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
i'm very sympathetic to this sense of emotion  but i think it's important to keep your head up, or some other cheesy expression Your poetry is very well written! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
zu-thanks mr zu, lol you have no idea how much your screen name amuses me =) heaven's tears-thanks...i know i'm not the only one whose felt this way but it still sucks. i'm glad you're there for me :-) n i'll try to smile...hehe see i just did! *points to mr smiley face* yaaaaay!!!! spice-wow i'm glad you liked it =) and ya...i'd say the main emotions here are anger and sadness lol. thanks for replyin. sea-awesome poem! seriously...i felt that one too. i think i'm getting a lil better...but it still hurts ya know? thanks for your offer. maybe i'll take u up on it sometime. i really appreciate it =) marie-ya i was feelin pretty bad, but i think i'm better now. i'd never kill myself, no person is worth taking ur own life. thanks for responding :-) linc-wow thanks...it makes me feel really good when ppl tell me how much they love it, lol i know that sounds stuck up but oh well. thanks again for replyin =) stace-yeah lots o ppl have been there, which sucks. i'm glad you're okay from it...thanks for being nice and stuff. it means a lot to me =) O.O.C-thanks...sometimes cheesy expressions work lots lol. thanks for replyin! hey you guys...seriously thanks for reading my stuff, and being nice about your responses. it means a lot to me, and helps too. -fear- emotions are like evil serpents that coil around your mind---me "i cannot save you, i can't even save myself"--stabbing westward |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
First of all, you go fear. Don't let anyone make you feel lower than them. Youve shown so much inner strangth in this poem keep it up and remain strong thanks for sharing hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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FoxXena Member
since 2001-06-13
Posts 141where dragons play, children run free and foxes are never hunted |
Not all emotions kill. Just look at the happy times. ~*~It is said that laughter is the shortest distance between two people...~*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Bite sized pieces, eh? Sounds like a not so fun situation. I liked how this was written. I also liked the part where you said "Screw you" haha. Nicely done there. Stay strong.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
I liked this one alot...its a tough situation and I know it sucks majorly...but this was an excellent part I too liked the "Screw you" part...gets right down to the point....one day at a time.. ~Nikki~ [This message has been edited by Shygirl82 (edited 06-27-2001).] |
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DYME Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 104Texas |
THAT SUONDS LIKE SOMETHING I WOULD SAY!! I CAN RELATE TO THIS ONE ALMOST TOO WELL. IT'S LIKE YOU READ MY THOUGHTS. THAT'S SCARY...A LITTLE TOO SCARY!! BUT I LOVED THIS ONE. THE EMOTION IN IT WAS LIKE...BAM, HERE IT IS. No weapon formed against me shall prosper... ISAIAH 54:17 |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
ya...now he's hitting on my best friend...thanks for the comments guys =) -fear- emotions are like evil serpents that coil around your mind---me "i cannot save you, i can't even save myself"--stabbing westward |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
That only shows you what kind of person he truly is. hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
thanks acire...i know that he's not a very good person sometimes, but i still love him ya know?? so my brain can hate him, but my heart still pretty much IS him. i am not sure if that makes sense...oh well. i just wanted to thank you guys for being there and reading my stuff. it means a lot to me =) -fear- emotions are like evil serpents that coil around your mind---me "i cannot save you, i can't even save myself"--stabbing westward |
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scout Member
since 2001-06-16
Posts 175no place owns me |
in my younger teen years (i only have a couple months left of teen years) i was influenced by 4 girls, they were my best friends when i was 13, and they taught me two things... that i should never change, and that all boys suck! to this day, i hold that true. i love the power in this poem, you can really feel your anger. xscoutx |
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angel_2401 Member
since 2001-06-12
Posts 131Cincinnati, OH |
I know this one all too well. I like the way you worded it, and I have to agree with Dopes, I liked the "screw you" part. Keep it strong. Guys just need to grow up. lol Keep smiling!I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Sounds like you should be teaching Justin a lesson... Honestly - your raw emotions really meant something. They gave so much more the piece than just little words strung together to sound pretty. You've done a great job here because you have told it like it is. Thanks for the read. ~AF~ Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!! |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
This was a very strong poem. The structure and the rhythm add to the strength of it! It was an excelent read! ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
full of powerful emotions..i can relate to this about someone close to me...hope things get better Fear. im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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