Teen Poetry #5 |
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ForeverMyOwn Junior Member
since 2001-11-23
Posts 13Brighton, MI |
Shining bright, a little light. A simple tear, a raging fear. Pull me down, take up my crown. A glint of gold, a future unfolds. |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I really liked the short lines of this piece it was very enjoyable to read. If you see this message I have just replied to your poem. I have poems as well *hint* [This message has been edited by Marshalzu (03-03-2002 07:01 PM).] |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
Short but sweet...easier to read after reading and replying to 1000 0thers (yes replying!!!!!) Great job!!!! ~LCBS |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Short and sweet..nicely done! iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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angel_2401 Member
since 2001-06-12
Posts 131Cincinnati, OH |
I thought this was really cute. It was short, but that made it even more unique. Great work!!! Kristin I'm not just A Princess, I'm THE Princess!!!!! ~*~I love Matt!~*~ |
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-Queth- Junior Member
since 2002-02-10
Posts 35Canada |
The way you decided to use short lines for a short piece was a very good decision. It made it quite easy to read, and more enjoyable. It was simple in it's own way, yet the foil between the first four lines helped clarify some other interwoven messages. Keep up the good work! Q.u.e.t.h. Everything in between... |
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