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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2002-02-21 06:58 PM


Twisting...
Falling..
Fading, into love laced memories
I thought
I had control
Over all the raw emotions
That were trying
To surface, trying
To tie me down to a bed of shame
I try to cover my heart
So I cannot
Hear the wind whispering
Out your name
But instead
I'm being choked
I swear
I'm close
To losing control
And start dreaming
Of you again
I guess
I'll be fine
Just as long
As I don't admit
That you really did love me
All of this time...




[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (02-21-2002 07:01 PM).]

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Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
1 posted 2002-02-21 07:15 PM


wow, i liked this one. i dunno wut else 2 say. bye

~If u luv something, let it go,if it comes back 2 u, its urs, if it doesnt, it never wuz..~DMX

Jenabou
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since 2000-06-13
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2 posted 2002-02-21 07:17 PM


Powerful,powerful poem
I'm really feeling this one
GREAT work

*for someone who's used to heartache,losing it all was just a matter of time*
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

PoetryIsLife
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...in my boxers...
3 posted 2002-02-25 04:07 PM


Wow, kris, I really like this one. Very... real. And dark. Loved the ending. Another four star, my dear.

Sincerely,
The Titus

The One, The Only... The Titus.

cherish
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since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........
4 posted 2002-02-28 04:56 AM


remember how i said that i was fast becoming a fan? well now you have a full blown fan.. ...i can really relate to your poems...keep em coming!

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
5 posted 2002-02-28 11:54 PM


i came to the site to look for a poem that fits my situation...this is sooo it. It's really comforting to know that someone knows how I'm feeling and to read something that relates so well to life. Excellent job.

The day you were born, you were born free
That is your privilege.

xShUgArHiGhx
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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
6 posted 2002-03-02 09:46 AM


i've come to believe that we really dont have much control when it comes to love..im not so shur if its a good thing or a bad thing though...im kinda undecided...Your poem was really good...keep up the great work!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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with you
7 posted 2002-03-02 10:37 AM


WOW! I am keeping this one. I LOVE this, and I relate sooooooo much thank you for this!!
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