Teen Poetry #5 |
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Masquerade |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA ![]() |
What drains this sweet nectar Of misery from my eyes When it's you I see Across the room Shrouded by mysteries disguise How is it that I can feel your stare Through this maddening labrynthe Of cloaked men and adorning women The swirl of music Flirting with my burning heart How is it possible That destiny poisoned me with it's kiss Within an atmosphere like this A colourful masquerade |
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babygurl * Junior Member
since 2001-12-07
Posts 30 |
very good... i like the word masquerade... |
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gracianna Member
since 2002-02-17
Posts 165A 14 year hell |
I like this...great word choices I give a whole new meaning to the word 'sad.' |
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chas Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 101Lynn, ma |
amazing work.. flow was nice. sweet that you made the last word the tittle.. |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Lol to your critique message...no you do not suck I liked this a lot...good word usage, lots of imagery and emotion. Hats off to you ![]() The day you were born, you were born free |
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