I can tell somethings wrong

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Teen Poetry #5

I can tell somethings wrong

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

0 posted 2002-02-12 10:05 PM

I can tell somethings wrong
by the sound of your voice
and your deep painful sighs

I can see the pain through your soul

I can tell somethings wrong
by your shaking little hands
and the pallor of your skin

Your not here, and your not whole

I can tell somethings wrong
by your urgent pitiful tone
and by the dark bags under your eyes

I can see the pain through your soul

Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more...

sleepymoongirl
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 157
bc canada

1 posted 2002-02-13 11:02 PM

i sure hope the person you wrote this poem for reads it its alwayz nice to know someone cares i liked the poem =D

gracianna
Member

since 2002-02-17

Posts 165
A 14 year hell

2 posted 2002-02-17 08:33 PM

Boy, it would be nice if everyone cared that much to even notice...

I give a whole new meaning to the word 'sad.'

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

3 posted 2002-02-17 09:57 PM

I too hope that the person you wrote the poem for realizes how much you care.

I really liked this.

Dawn

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

4 posted 2002-02-17 10:28 PM

Obviously you care alot about this person. Have you ever tried to help them??

~ShAtTeReD mEmOrIeS,
aRe AlL i HaVe LeFt,
Of YoU aNd Me.~

[This message has been edited by ERIN (02-17-2002 10:28 PM).]

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