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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia 
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Mortgage Simplest joys untamed Set flustered 'gainst broken window pane (Dripping always dripping) Rainbow kaleidescope and crazy quilt Secrets unleased full hilt Secrets yet unnamed Stained glass bloody mother Set content into empty pane (Shining always shining) Crimson cloth and holy white Bleeding equestrian ride at night Faith bought more than to smother Boarded heavy earth and nail Framing death from outside pain (Whispering always whispering) Crackly rasp and hint of rosemary Was never but a door to protect me Because this house, this soul Is not for sale "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings [This message has been edited by fozzyozzy (edited 07-08-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought the poem was ok, but the ending was the best part. You have VERY strong endings. I really liked it. Well done here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Yet another that makes me read and re-read and read again...I hope I got everything in here. Another very good piece from you... ~Carly "Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught..." |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I like, I love!! Not much else to say! Great write, as usual! Rhonda  "Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked the ending  ...great job!im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I agree- I liked the ending the most. Wonderful. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
The ending part made it better, but in the beginning part, i couldn't seem to grasp what was being talked about. Keep sharing. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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