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Patty o'brien
New Member

since 2001-10-07

Posts 4

0 posted 2002-01-05 03:09 PM

Listening loudly to a silent scream
Cant tell if I'm awake
Or if this is just a dream

Drowning in the invisible blood I've bled
Can't listen or think
It's all in my head

You dont understand, you cant apprehend
Dont try to sooth me
I dont need a friend

You think Im too angry
and I should take time to think
Reality is you dont know the real me

Tamma

Senior Member

since 2000-01-17

Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

1 posted 2002-01-05 06:50 PM

Oh, MY...I've felt this very way so many tymes in my life! Great REAd! Hope to see more

~ Tamma

If I held a star everytyme
he made me smile,I'd have the
evening sky in my palm, if
one was removed for every tear
he caused, I'd be emptyhanded.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-01-05 07:09 PM

Wow...this is practically my life story!!! Amazing job on this....one of my fav poems of all times probably!! Great poem!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2002-01-05 10:52 PM

I enjoyed this... you expressed yourself well through heavy emotions. Welcome to Teen Poetry 5! I know you're going to enjoy yourself at PIPtalk. Just remember: replies are a two-way-street... don't forget to let others know what you think about their work as well.

I really liked this, and I look forward to reading more from you.

--Marie

"It was a long December, but there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows)

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2002-01-05 11:00 PM

I like it! I think you're going to be just fine in here! Great write, and thanks for sharing! I know I've felt that way a lot. Thanks again!

You know you're Canadian when if something's broken, the first thing you ask is if it can be fixed with WD-40 or Duct Tape

HiddenSparklez
Member

since 2000-12-29

Posts 190
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2002-01-06 03:13 AM

This is a very strong and powerful piece all based on raw emotions... great way to put it all into words that others can understand!

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

6 posted 2002-01-06 04:59 AM

Yeah I also know the feeling and it sucks.But anyway I can relate to this poem and I really like it a lot so I can't wait to read more of your work.
Lauren

"I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind

"You've got to get yourself together you got stuck in a moment and y

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

7 posted 2002-01-06 09:47 AM

Hey, I really liked this!!! I can definitely relate to the feeling that ppl don't know who you really are, and it sucks! But u wrote this very well. I hope to see more soon!!

~*Nikki*~

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

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