Teen Poetry #5 |
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Loves Masquerade |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
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“Loves Masquerade” My heart My dreams My destiny All come crashing to the ground Like a glass chandelier Shattering upon a ballroom floor The music once filled my veins Making me whole Whenever I was near you I loved you more Then life itself Or anything else Within this world Moving with the sounds Life with you carried on As though I was living Within a never ending dream We danced with the rhythm Letting it sweep us away To place of wonder To a place of love But as all things Even dreams must end You stopped the dance While the music still played I was left alone Emptiness filled my heart I was alone Despair filled my soul I am alone You will not return I am still alone Alone… As the music plays And others do their dance I stand amidst them all Waiting for a partner That shall never come While the music plays And couples dance As one I no longer sway to music Nor crave its sweet sounds For they were created by you And you false love I now wait for this torment to end To find another to dance To the sounds of a new melody To bring true love to my heart To finally bring an end To all that was before All I felt All I knew To you And your loves masquerade It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. I've learned that even when you th [This message has been edited by LoneWolf (01-04-2002 12:55 PM).] |
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gymnast Member
since 2001-11-18
Posts 80Scotland. |
This poem is great! It really shows all your feeliings! I hope it all works out for you, don't give up on love, coz you'll find it-even if it takes time. Keep up the good work-coz this poem is BRILL!!!!! ![]() |
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gymnast Member
since 2001-11-18
Posts 80Scotland. |
This poem is great! It really shows all your feeliings! I hope it all works out for you, don't give up on love, coz you'll find it-even if it takes time. Keep up the good work-coz this poem is BRILL!!!!! ![]() |
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lone_poet707 Member
since 2001-11-17
Posts 70black hole named Aylmer |
beautiful....thats all i can think of sayin to describe this piece. sometimes we're all blind to the fact that that special person isnt all dat special. im sure the light will shine too brightly for u to ignore it, no matter how tightly u shut ur eyes to it! -Joe |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow! This is awesome, LoneWolf. I really enjoyed this... the whole metaphor of love and the dance was very well done. It made for a very good read. Thanks for sharing this with us. It'e great to see you posting again... I look forward to reading more ![]() Very well done. --Marie "It was a long December, but there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows) |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I'm not sure exactly what it was about this poem that made me love it so much, but I think it's absolutely beautiful!! The end of it almost brought a tear to my eye, so you obviously wrote it very well. This is going into my library. I hope you get happy. ![]() ![]() *~Fighting for your love~* |
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LCsftball16 Junior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 39 |
i thought this poem was absolutely amazing! i love the emotion you put into this! keep up the great work and can't wait to read more! |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
thanks for the replies |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"I was left alone Emptiness filled my heart I was alone Despair filled my soul I am alone You will not return I am still alone Alone…" Those verses striked me greatly with power and emotion [I related...] VERY heartfelt and sincere expression. *sigh* "Dont piss me off. Im runing out of places to hide the bodies." [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (02-06-2002 02:13 AM).] |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WOw a lot of feeling in this one...you expressed loneliness and love so deeply...nicely done BoOsH bOoSh nApoLE |
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