Teen Poetry #5 |
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Beneath the curtain |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Black velvet curtains, with a dusty tale to tell dirty, dark and tattered showing resemblences of hell. Hanging low and heavy creating cobwebs on the floor lathargic, draping masks which surely should tell more. ^*~*^ But wait, there may be reason, why the curtains seem to fail, for beneath the tattered blackness hides a different tale. A shiny pristine window, always there but you never knew that it held such fragrenced beauty in its rosy, cosy view. "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow Kicking Kim this was a great piece and I really enjoyed the read I just loved your description of the curtain... The flow was great as well although there may have been a few places where it was off slightly... anyway hope to read more soon ![]() Zu "Here we are again finding ourselves at the end Of the wrong stick I guess it's far too late I'm building up the barricades In my head" -My Vitriol |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Forgot to put it in my library... |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
...the discription was lovely ![]() im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Beautifully written Kim. The description was wonderful. [This message has been edited by Spice (edited 07-07-2001).] |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one.....the description was wonderful, but i didn't find this to be as wonderful as most of your other pieces. I did enjoy it though. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Maynard Junior Member
since 2001-06-29
Posts 12IL |
this is an incredible write! i liked.. "I have nothing to tell you or sell you for the moment... but thank you for asking." |
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Heavens Tears![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Gosh, you are on a roll. I have enjoyed all of your poems today. Especially this one. I really did like it, especially the meaning I took from it. *Amanda* |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is awesome, Kim. The descriptions here are outstanding. Wonderful imagery... I really enjoyed this! Beautiful work. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is really good. The rhyme and flow is beautiful. Reminds me of a rhyming tale. Keep it up and keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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