Teen Poetry #5 |
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Shackled |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
From the pits of despair I look out my pitiful excuse of a window And see the shadowed moon glaring back at me Through narred branches and falling snow Taunting me with it's freedom. Then again, perhaps it's the sun It's only 5:30pm afterall I don't which way I'm facing anymore Doesn't matter... my mind is too messed up to care. Dark shadows fill my sight Growing larger with every step that's taken. Take the mirror I'm about to shatter.. It shows the truth more often than I like, It echos every tear, every scream... every thought. Hollow smiles, empty moments, false hopes, Masks of every expression, And cold beds of lies Make of everything I do now. The moon's disappeared now Along with it's mocking glow But here I'll remain... with these shackles And lead ball dragging close behind, Chained to the darkness of my mind. |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
yeah i know it doesn't make sense and it's really dark and depressing.. but that's just the mood i've been in lately... |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very expressive and you wrote this wonderfully...nice job!! I liked it a lot ![]() ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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punkrockerrobin![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
i liked this poem a lot! great work! robin repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created! |
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Domzi Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 288New York (BK) |
Great expression in this poem! Poetry is spiritual ventilation! |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
The imagery is awesome so it paints a great picute some may call it dark and depressing, but I like it! Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
As was said, the images portrayed here are amazing.. "Through narred branches and falling snow Taunting me with it's freedom." I love those lines ^^ Very nice work, mistic. It's been awhile since I've seen you around here. I hope I see you more soon. (: Nicely done. --Marie "It's been a long December, and there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows) |
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C? Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 190 |
besides being kinda long and wordy, its got great emotional imagery!! thats my opinion at least!! nice job, |
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Android 17![]() ![]()
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hmmm...this poem is well done! I really like art---especially well done, dark peices such as yours. There is no light without a dark, am I right? The trick is to know when to walk away---and TO KNOW WHEN TO RUN!!! |
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prov1717 Member
since 2001-12-26
Posts 74NE |
"Take the mirror I'm about to shatter.. It shows the truth more often than I like, It echos every tear, every scream... every thought." i like it...like it a lot!!! |
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