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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Dizzy in my own self-blundering, I stumble over ideas that shift and shake through my mind Obvious self-destructive pearl, but not quite so - I don't want to die, not yet, but I I like to grow And what better way than to fall upon dirty daggers and hungry hating girls And for me to taste everyone, one by one or all at once Surely light has it's influence you learn how to beautify, but how much do you think? It's pretty simple But now when you're knocking on the door of death you find yourself spiraling in thoughts and thoughts Wondering why it hurts, and how to stop the madness So you turn the pages, swallowing up more and more more and more... The only trouble is when you get there, you're going fast oh so fast, and you can't stop Such a casual death The only thing that I fear is to die quietly. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Oke, this isn't good or anything but I was just bored and figured I'd spit something out. So ignore me.  Happy Holidays everyone. The only thing that I fear is to die quietly. jaimespoetry.blogspot.com [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (12-24-2001 12:25 PM).] |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Dont say it wasnt good because it WAS good..lol u dont kno what your talking about Seems like u have a lot on your mind....GOOD poem ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
A lot as always.. haha Thanks The only thing that I fear is to die quietly. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"So you turn the pages, swallowing up more and more more and more... The only trouble is when you get there, you're going fast oh so fast, and you can't stop Such a casual death" wow, your writing was well written esp this part as it protrays the racing heart of the sitaution VERY well. "on the door of death you find yourself spiraling in thoughts and thoughts Wondering why it hurts, and how to stop the madness" SoOo true. I REALLY liked this piece, awesome job, Jamie. [ so i mixed up the order of the poem...sue me  ]Hey...#25437 What! You in there? Yea, im in here. ok [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (12-24-2001 08:11 PM).] |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Stopping always tends to be the problem doesn't it. Darn those brakes that don't work, niether the ones on the car or in me work so yeah. Good job! (i will stop babbling now) Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"But now when you're knocking on the door of death you find yourself spiraling in thoughts and thoughts Wondering why it hurts, and how to stop the madness" I don't think I could have said it better myself. Very nice work. The way you portrayed the subject, and presented the material was well done. I'm impressed! Very nice work! --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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prov1717 Member
since 2001-12-26
Posts 74NE |
"wondering why it hurts and how to stop the madness" thats just sweet! you say it all so well! thank you. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
I don't want to die, not yet, but I I like to grow And what better way than to fall upon dirty daggers and hungry hating girls And for me to taste everyone, one by one or all at once Wow! What a vivid piece. I really enjoyed it.... I really like the first two lines I just pasted. Anyways, good write. I enjoyed it. Hope you enjoyed writing it. Oh, by teh way, email me, eh?  Titus |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is excellent I'm just speechless simple form, but it hits hard keep it up thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Dark Enchantress, it IS good!!!! Hope to see more from you... _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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