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fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

0 posted 2001-07-06 09:59 PM

Lender's Song

Nothing to give; give except the wind
All that has taken no receipt
Kept for me, i have thus forgetten and sinned
Against Lender's soul i left deceipt

Borrower be; borrower me is who I am ,to
be;(only Lender see) should ask for defeat
Kept for me, i have thus forgetten who i am owed to
Against Lender's soul i left deceipt

Breeze against glass(apologies too) Fro,st
cold against my skin stealing the seat
Kept for a fellow passer and welcome among the lost
Against Lender's soul i left deceipt

Tune drummed before a timeless court
Lemons danced for the Lender; dance with conceit
Kept for me,rich kisses with noses and a snort
Against Lender's soul i left deceipt

A smile left behind for me Lenders looking
for me, lemons lemons are where the days retreat
(exc)kept for me, the etcetera has stolen is cooking
Against Lender's soul i left deceipt

     if it shall want it
its not hidden far
     from where i wanted it
under the wind you loved
     behind the lemons
right over your nose
      i found it for you
          just for you  against the Lender's wish
      i found for you
            (Love)

"This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot

[This message has been edited by fozzyozzy (edited 07-06-2001).]

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-07-08 02:16 AM

I liked the ending of this one Fozzy. Well done here. Shocking that i'm the first replier.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

2 posted 2001-07-08 12:41 PM

wow. This was crazy awesome. i have nothing to say...lol

Regina

zarina
Member

since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

3 posted 2001-07-08 03:16 PM

It's nice

I liked it..

I am always myself. Isn't that enough for you?

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

4 posted 2001-07-08 03:38 PM

I really liked the format at the end. It was awesome. Thanks for the great read!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

5 posted 2001-07-08 10:31 PM

I really liked this...like ALOT.
Absolutely amazing write...

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-07-13 03:07 PM

This is impressive. You did really well. Keep it up.

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