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LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

0 posted 2001-12-19 02:58 PM

“Damned”

My world once held
Much light
Much hope
Much love

But now my world
Begins to fade

I see the shadows fall
Across the places where
Light once shown

Giving birth to the fears
Of a child
Wondering where the monsters are

Damning me to this world
Damning me to this place
Damning me to myself
Damning me to my heart

I feel despair start to crawl
Up on the places where
My hope once laid

Giving rise to the faith
Of the damned
Walking in illusion for eternity

Damning me to this world
Damning me to this place
Damning me to myself
Damning me to my heart

I feel the indifference start to climb
On to the happy place
That my love once called home

Giving grounds for the pain
Of the lonely
Left to mind their broken hearts

Damning me to this world
Damning me to this place
Damning me to myself
Damning me to my heart

Now my world has grown
To a horrifying place
I am left in a pool
Of darkness
Damned to walk
An eternity
Within the lonely bounds
Of my broken heart

Damning me to this world
Damning me to this place
Damning me to myself
Damning me to my heart

I don’t’ know what to do
I pray to be set free
From this dreadful place
As my light
My hope
My love
Begin to fade
Damning me to this world
Damning me to this place
Damning me to myself
Damning me to my heart
For all eternity

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

1 posted 2001-12-19 05:46 PM

Wow...very poerful poem I loved it but it's kind of depressing.
Lauren

"I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-12-19 07:03 PM

i realted to this[as we tend to, each others pieces]...such desperation was well expressed, the repitition came out to be VERY powerful verses in this poem...the way you divided each stanzas worked wonderfully. Hope all is well; havent seen you around though. if you need someone to talk about things feel free to e-mail.

Hey...#25437
What!
You in there?
Yea, im in here.
ok

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (12-19-2001 07:07 PM).]

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

3 posted 2001-12-20 06:43 PM

WOW! I loved it! it's one of the best pieces I've read at pip. Wonderful. The repitition became a bit distracting, but I loved the ending... it was beautiful. I too pray you are set free. Again, great write.

Good luck...

Sincerely,
Titus

Zukene_Chic
Member

since 2001-09-26

Posts 152
Cali

4 posted 2001-12-20 10:01 PM

Are you talking about your life? I mean... when everyone was a child, nothing was wrong. And now we're all damned. Is this what you mean? It was a lovely write.

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