Teen Poetry #5 |
[Falling Eternity] |
[Ice Box] Junior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 21Canada |
Falling Eternity A shift of light Enough... Covered snowflakes falling Softly, footsteps in the snow Each a lovely, dancing figure Upon the ground Quietly. A reflection Sighed... Black glass falling Between the lashes of the snow That danced between, entwined So many thoughts pass through Unnoticed. Eternity falling... [Constellations between the sky and earth Doth snow fall willingly upon your lips An enticement of the sweetest thing Quelling all but silence.] [Ice Box] ps- I was told to write something kinda romantic. Heh...try this on for size. Try not to gag, okay? *hehehe* I tried my best. The main body of it is deeper though. If you've ever looked at snow, sometimes there's little designs and holes in them, and when you imagine them falling, you can see black glass...Okay, so I'm a little insane. But it's all right. It's almost Christmas! *grin* Frappe. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"A reflection Sighed..." wow...i personally REAllY liked that part...very simple yet discriptive...even through what is said it goes beyond the meaning of what is said...like your style of writing is deep. Me likes "Constellations between the sky and earth Doth snow fall willingly upon your lips An enticement of the sweetest thing Quelling all but silence.]" lovely...pure beauty...very well written...overall i really liked what i see from the first poem till now...keep it up, im liking every moment of 'em. Many jingles to you. [lol!] Hey...#25437 |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Very nice I really like it keep up the awsome work. Lauren "I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
NICE JOB!!!!!!!! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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