Teen Poetry #5 |
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ForgiveMe |
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jaded Junior Member
since 2001-07-24
Posts 20 |
I'm sorry this isnt anything amazing, but it was how I felt at the time, and I just wanted to see what anyone felt about it, thanks! *************************** ForgiveMe *************************** Sorry, Can be hard to say I'd hate to see things end this way Now every word I speak is true I beg forgiveness off of you Sorry, I'll say it time and time You gifted me, this life of mine Just tell me what I have to do My life is worthless without you The brightest star in the whole galaxy You gave me the gift of shining on me From the oceans below and the heavens above I promise you all of my undying love If you will forgive me, I promise you this From the depth of my heart, with the gentlest kiss I give you my heart, please be gentle I'll love you, more than any one else |
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MindlessPoet Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 106Texas |
how could someone not forgive you after that? hehe. That was a beautiful poem, and it flowed nicely ![]() For now, all I can do is dream. |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
So incredibly sweet. I liked it much!!! ![]() Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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Alyssa![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
i like i like! ....Handle with care... |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Whoever you wrote this too should forgive you it's a beautiful piece I loved it. Lauren "I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Wow this was very good, i liked it a lot It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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PoetryIsLife![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Very nicely done. Quite sweet. ![]() Titus |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
I felt the somewhat desperation of "needing" and probably what it might of felt like writing...though it was sweet. and definitly deserves forgiveness. Hey...#25437 |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I hope they forgive you!!!!!!! ![]() ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Sometimes those three words: "I forgive you" is the only thing we need to hear to continue with life again. Very nicely written, and more than deserving of that forgiveness. *hugs* Good luck. Well done. ![]() --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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