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corey14
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0 posted 2001-12-16 12:22 PM



I loved you,
And you didnt love me back.
But how could you,
I never told you.
Seeing that now you know,
Will the fealing change.

Loving you is all I need,
But something I cant have.
This world has never ben fair to me,
But some how I make the best.

But there is still that empty space,
In my heart there will alway be room for you.
May thoes butterflys never go away,
For I will always love you.


Love never truly defined,
Just concored.

Please fill the empty space,
So I'm not left out on happyness.


live a little everyday and when its all over you will have lived a lot


© Copyright 2001 corey baker - All Rights Reserved
corey14
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1 posted 2001-12-16 12:37 PM


seeing as how no 1 reads my poems i will reply to my self
corey14
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2 posted 2001-12-16 12:39 PM


wow corey that was a very touching poem and i hope you keep writeing this is very true some times i cant tell some one i love them and then i fell left out

cutie2005
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3 posted 2001-12-16 02:50 PM


Corey,
   This was a very good poem! I liked it!  I feel the same way about someone, so I konw where you are coming from, just gotta move on i guess.. But thanks for sharing!

    Always
      Amanda

If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them!



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4 posted 2001-12-17 12:16 PM


Wow, I can understand this. Sometimes regret of not telling your feelings can be awful, try to be more honest with your feelings.
Nice write, the only critique I have is in a few spelling/gramatic type errors. *fealing= feeling

Jenn


"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 12-17-2001).]

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5 posted 2001-12-20 06:25 PM


While it stumbled near the end, I liked it. I hope whoever you're writting this too fills that empty space soon. Stay strong while you wait. Again, it was nice.

Titus

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6 posted 2001-12-21 02:16 AM


Regret is a tough thing to deal with expecially when it has to do with how you were feeling.But nice poem keep up the awsome work.
    Lauren

"I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind


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7 posted 2001-12-21 06:32 AM


First of all that was a great poem, I really enjoyed the read. Thankyou for sharing this piece with us.


Secondly and this is not just directed to you, but... If you want people to reply to your poems you should reply to theirs. If I post one poem I'm going to reply to ten, that way ten people can reply to mine... see how it works... I am sick of trying to tell people this is how it works here....

Zu

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8 posted 2001-12-21 08:10 AM


I loved this poem Corey

I thought it was very true...i've been in a similar situation a while ago and i know how torcherous it gets...Ahhhh Love...cant live with it and cant live without it..

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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