Teen Poetry #5 |
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Speechless" (or, if you like, "Echo.")- 2nd last |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
A lamp light flickers Silently, a lullaby within itself. A frigid wind passes by Waiting for the frost. A bitter breath, exhale remorse A frozen tear, still wet with love Yet stoned by blinded eyes... One doth see but once. I called a name into the darkness It faded before it crossed my lips For nothing carried the words To your ears. You are there because you breathe... Speechless because you cease to look beyond the breath That carries the words to the heart... Echoing. + + + + + As some of you may have remembed once upon a time, I wrote a poem called Echoing. Or something like that. Well, consider this a rewrite. ^_^ Every emotion in this piece is true. It's as deep as anyone will ever see. Don't count on anything deeper...you might hurt yourself. ^^ Maybe if you look a little harder, you can see a reflection of yourself... ++ Leah ++ Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
*sigh* what can i say...such emotions i read from the heart and taken to the heart...your piece is somewhat different from what i read from you so far as your expression i can almost sense and somewhat relate, sincerely. such talent i will never cease to read...LEAH Will yah consider your departure from here, peas? Hey...#25437 What! You in there? Yea, im in here. ok [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 12-08-2001).] |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"A frozen tear, still wet with love Yet stoned by blinded eyes.." -- poignant, well constructed lines here. I loved the overall feel of this piece. It is completely drenched in your emotions. Truly stunning work, this is what poetry is about. ![]() *Krista Knutson* |
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Acies![]()
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You are just simply amazing muah muah muah I just love you work, so keep sharing simply outstanding là où est mon amour? |
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Android 17![]() ![]()
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Leah---your work always leaves me thinking for about the next 15 minutes...and you know me...that's an IMPOSSIBILITY! I think it goes unsaid...but this is REEEEEEEEEEEEEEAL good! [b]Surrender now, or prepare to fight![b] |
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