Teen Poetry #5 |
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I'll Show You! |
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branden726![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI ![]() |
You left me lonely, You left me blue, You left me so quick, I never had a clue, I'll Show You! You made me feel sad, You made me feel mad, You made me cry to my dad, I'll Show You! You left me for him, You left me for another, You left me when you knew I would never love another, I'll Show You! How much you hurt me, How bad I feel, How I lay in bed because I am ill, How I loved you but you never cared, I'll Show You! Someday, Maybe, When im not afraid. P.S. I still love you. All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare! |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
very sad but nice poem it is filled with a lot of emotions. Lauren "I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind |
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Honey Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 92Hot girl From Canada |
Good write sweetie lots of emotion.... but what bout me??? ![]() ~Ashley~ It Feels As If I've Always Been Someone On The Outside Looking In. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Aww branden! *hugs* Such strength throughout the piece then the end you lost it. Don't be afraid, matey. We have nothing to fear but fear itself. Just go up to her and tell the rat what you think. ~AF~ Why does Sea World have a seafood restaurant? I'm halfway through my fish burger and I realize, Oh my gosh....I could be eating a slow learner. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I liked it. You showed the mixed and complex sides of love loss very well. Hang in there. When you lose one it's because you were meant to find another. The only thing that I fear is to die quietly. |
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branden726![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Well, thanks guys i love ya lots and well Ashley i dont know ya hun but what about ya? lol. Hehe i know what all u guys mean but hey im gonna be around here showing my lovely emotions again. ![]() |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Awww... this is so sad. I'm sorry you lost your love, someone obviously very close to you. This is a nice vent though... keep writing about it. it helps. *hugs* --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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Alyssa![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
i sooooooo know hwo this goes love this piece [This post has been created by Alyssa, be joyous she has graced you with her pressence!!!] |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Just be strong it's ok to show em how much you love em still just don't try to get back at em in a bay way là où est mon amour? |
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