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Thank God I Found You
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Thank God I Found You |
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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
Thank god I found you, You always make me smile, Whenever life gets me down, It's your phone number I dial. Thank god I found you, Your always here for me, I can tell you anything, My point you always see. Thank god I found you, You treat me like I'm the best, You tell me I'm beautiful, And I'm better than the rest. Thank god I found you, My prayer has finally come true, I asked god for the nicest guy, And to me, god sent you. Thank god I found you, To hold me in the rain, To sheild my heart from daggers, And to ease all of my pain. Thank god I found you, I'll never let you go, In my heart is where you'll stay, And my love for you I'll show.
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a very good poem. It had a really nice flow to it, and a well written rhyme scheme as well. Very sweet words you say here  I'm happy that you found that special person. Good luck in the future with him. The only critique I have for this poem is every time you use the work God, capitalize the "G".Nice work. I hope to see more soon. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
"Thank god I found you, To hold me in the rain, To sheild my heart from daggers, And to ease all of my pain." ^ |My favorite lines. hehe. | The rhyming was great- it made the poem flow very nicely. Such a sweet poem. I'm glad you found that special someone. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
beautiful...and this was a nice poem...i liked it. [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-06-2001).] |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Lovely poem I really loved it and I hope to read more of your peoms soon.Keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
This was wonderful!! Sounds like this guy is a winner keep him close to you and don't let him go! if you do i might have to visit him... he sounds so perfect! jk you can have him... i got mine LOLValerie "...And i want to take you down, but your soul could not be found, doesn't matter much you see cause your disease is killing me..." -Saliva |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Wow! I really liked this one! I can totally relate to this, except that I am a guy. I have a friend that has been there for me always. I definitely know how it feels to find that special person that is always there for you, very well written! This is one of my favorites, it's going to my library. - Cody - If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!! If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid? [This message has been edited by CwboyAtHeart (edited 07-07-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very nice poem here I am enjoying your work. Well done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
This was great. i loved it. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is totally sweet. He must be really special. I loved the read. Thanks for sharing. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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