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Teen Poetry #5

you are...

allie
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since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

0 posted 2001-11-09 07:10 AM

You're the white stich,
in the ebony tapestry of life.
The exception to the rule,
The rebel who writes his own law.

But you're my rebel,
The surfer the skater.
The musician the painter,
You're trouble.

You're the complex error,
where perfection went wrong.
The exception to the rule,
The rebel who rewrites perfection.

But you're my perfect,
The blond the tanned.
Shoes filled with sand,
You're just right.

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-11-09 08:50 AM

Interesting... really. You contradicted yourself a lot but that's obviously the intent of the poem. Are you confused about something?
I like the idea of imperfection being perfect for you. I know how that is.

Theo

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2001-11-09 10:00 AM

This poem rocked!!! WoW im not even shur what to say about this...great job!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

3 posted 2001-11-09 06:47 PM

I like the contradictions going on in here, you did a great job with that. I think, when you really love somebody, it doesn't even matter what they "are" because you love and accept it all as a whole. Great job!

~*Nikki*~

~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~

allie
Member

since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

4 posted 2001-11-10 02:04 AM

Thankyou so much for the replies... contradiction was the idea glad that was seen! Thankz sooo much, im just a little confused about a guy! lol

Thankz again! Allie

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