Teen Poetry #5 |
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Steadfast |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia ![]() |
Steadfast Will thou not build me a willow cabin at thy gates? If an hour's travel told you singing praises; would thou never scold so harshly my love (dancing so lightly in your playing) Others make a mockery of Build me first an IandYou Straying from a beaten path so new So straightforward in my love (dancing so lightly in your playing) Others make an example of Captured earliest flowers fade away With all the coming hours And so stands my Love (dancing and playing in your lightning) At your gates telling tales of YouandI "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings [This message has been edited by fozzyozzy (edited 11-07-2001).] |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Awsome poem I love it keep up the grear work. Lauren |
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Local Parasite![]()
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This was neat! I have never seen you before. It's nice to read from you! I like what you did with line breaks in the stanzas, it made the poem sound neat. ![]() Theo |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
FOZZY!!! OZZY!!! Sean......dude. Where ya been, eh? *shakes head* Going abstract again, I see. *sigh* A nice break from love poems. I think I missed this one, so *bump*. EVIL SINKING. I never get tired of your stuff. It always amazes me, and makes me think (which can be a good thing if done right) Always a pleasure reading your poems. ^_^ ++ Leah ++ ps- loved the first line. where do you come up with those? Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... [This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 11-08-2001).] |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Ooooh nice!!! I loved the way this one flowed! ![]() ~*Nikki*~ ~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~ |
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Knight of Secrecy Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 113San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice poem, Good job. -C.M. |
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