Teen Poetry #5 |
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Drama for a Teenage Baby Mama |
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Trina Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 97 |
It ain't easy being a teenage mother but that's what happens when you see a boy, get cute, then stupid. Yea, you end up in some real [edited]. A boy's lover, a baby's mother it's never expected when you're caught up in the moment and you don't know where you're going all you know is life's a [edited] when you're 2 months pregnant and showing Now you're all confused, worn out and feeling used. No more baby's daddy in your life. Grades are dropping, parties are stopping, and you're too young to be a wife Got all big headed from a boy's lies. Now you're all big bellied and treat it like a surprise. Why? why were you so stupid?so careless? so wild? Now baring a child you ask yourself was it really worthwhile. [This message has been edited by acire (edited 11-07-2001).] |
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since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This was a bit disturbing, but written well. A rhyme from time to time in the middle of nowhere is sometimes a great technique for a poem. It sounds like you're in a bit of a pickle. Good luck. Theo |
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Trina Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 97 |
Well thanx , I appreciate that but no need to worry I'm not a teenage mother but I decided to write about one since it's not the usual stuff I write about. Take care, Trina |
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Missthang Member
since 2001-07-03
Posts 103 |
wow wow wow! what a message you are sending. this is a powerful piece. being a single mother is a hard thing to do. hang in there girl and be the powerful woman that you are. *hugs* -ab *The heart is a house for love* |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This sounds like it should be a rap. It reminds me of City High's "What Would You Do?". I like the style of this, and the message. Nice work. ![]() ~*Nikki*~ ~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~ |
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Trina Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 97 |
Thanx, I take that as a real compliment especially since I love City High and that song "What Would You Do?" happens to be one of my favorites. I must say I didn't have that song in mind when I wrote this but hey if it reminds you of it that's cool. Take care, Trina |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is a very good topic to bring up and show others the mistakes that can be made. Though a lot of kids would say, "I'm not that stupid", it still can happen. I hope other readers can learn from this and keep it in their minds. Thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I just did a piece on this ![]() ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Trina Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 97 |
thanx both of u , i hope other readers will wise up too especially knowing the diseases that are spreading and the possibility of becoming a teen mother or father. Take care, Trina |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
This is a really good one!!! I know it hits home for alot of people i know...Keep up the good work!! Its good to see new topics posted up in here... Thanks for sharing!!! "If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend." |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow, so much power in here. You really wrote this well. I am impressed. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
i find it VERY hard to do character writes, especially in poetry. i think you did this VERY well, you had the language down to par- made it seem genuine. good stuff trina, i enjoyed the read.. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
This was really good... makes you think, a good write thankz! ALLIE |
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