Teen Poetry #5 |
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Love struck songs |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
*corny again sorry* I hate that you call all the shots, And that you can make my vision blur. You leave me singing love struck songs, While you sing to her. Your charm can make me lose my mind, Your kiss could make me die. You stole 24 hours from my day, Did that same time make her fly? I hate it that you don’t give a damn, That I don’t fill your head. That you walk in casual...poised, While I’m careful where I tread. Why can you look at me? Watch me turn and walk away. And feel nothing near to love, Not want to ask me to stay. When all I think of is, What to say or how to act. Anyway to win your heart, Anything to make you react. One day I’ll look you in the eye, And tell you I don’t care. Or tell you how much I love you? Would I ever dare? |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thank you for the great read, I absoloutely love this and I didn't think it was corny at all. Hope things get better ![]() Andrew "The feelings are replaced, And the words have all decayed, But it's another day ,it's another day" - My Vitriol "The gentle art of choking" |
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Knight of Secrecy Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 113San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very good poem. I'm thinking: True story??? Well done -C.M. |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I hate that you call all the shots, And that you can make my vision blur. You leave me singing love struck songs, While you sing to her. Ooohhh, that made me mad! Especially the "While you sing to her" part!! Grrr... Very heartfelt hun! Well done! ~I am a computer genius... Hey! How do you turn this thing on?!? |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
I don't think this was corny at all, it was pretty good actually. Thanks for sharing. |
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luckyducky_505 Member
since 2001-04-29
Posts 53Kentucky, USA |
I loved this much!! Not corny at all!! I really liked the first verse!! When I first saw you, I was afraid to talk to you. When I first talked to you, I was afraid to like you. When I first liked you, I was afraid to love |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Ahhh i complete relate to this one!! Hun i completely hear where your coming from..its a sucky situation...believe me...i kno!! Hope things get better for you...but this poem rocked!! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Thankyou sooo much guys!! |
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