Did We Just Not Try Enough?

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Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2001-10-28 01:41 AM

Did we just not try enough,
Or did we try too hard?
There was no fight between us
But it seems that we’re both scarred.

Did we just not try enough,
Or did we strive too much?
You disappeared not once, but twice,
And left me longing for your touch.

Did we just not try enough,
Or did we reach too far?
My love began to fade away,
And the door was left ajar.

Did we just not try enough,
Or did we not try at all?
I realized I’d stopped loving you,
When I stopped waiting for your call.

"Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice Doggy' while you search for a rock." - Will Rogers

Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

1 posted 2001-10-28 01:51 AM

I loved this one. It really hit very close to home for me. It was beautifully written and it possessed some very strong emotions within its words. Good Job!!:-)
~Nikki~

Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it...

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

2 posted 2001-10-28 01:52 AM

Forgot to add it to my library!!

Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it...

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

3 posted 2001-10-28 12:19 PM

Oi. This sounds a bit familiar to me.

I loved the emotions here. Well done.

Jenn

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

4 posted 2001-10-28 06:43 PM

awwwww shoot x2! we must be living identical lives. i really liked the last stanza..almost offered a ray off hope of moving on, because thats always the most difficult thing. but you always wonder why things dont work out, regardless of whether it was mutual or not. but yes yes, neways..great job!

*dq

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

Pixie-Babe03
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since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine

5 posted 2001-10-28 06:55 PM

wow, you hit the nail on the head in this one... it sees a lot of us are leading simialr lives, great work!
*pixie*

-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

Elvenblood
Member

since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

6 posted 2001-10-29 06:35 AM

*grr* hate to add to the chorus but I'm in that too. It's actually perfect, and you wrote it perfectly! I tried but couldn't. Anyway though, lol I got a lil tired of being yelled at in the halls at school, this helps though, thanks!

No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee

AngelPoet87
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

7 posted 2001-10-29 09:12 PM

oooo love that ending adam, what a way of putting your feelings into words. This one was stronger at the end than the beginning, understandably, but it was well written. As always. Lol.

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