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Teen Poetry #5

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quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2001-10-23 12:56 PM

An instrument
of self
destruction
creates
the

void

you
always thought
you wanted
to feel.

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

1 posted 2001-10-23 02:27 AM

ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooh! impressive jen, i loved the way you wrote it- spacing the 'void' away from the rest of the text. ...creating a world we could live in is sumtimes a good thing...

                            f t e
       wave           a     ...r     emotions crash in the reef of life
                 w    e

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

2 posted 2001-10-23 09:23 AM

Very interesting, very abstract...a bit of a thinker, perhaps. Nice work on the format.

Jenn

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

Knight of Secrecy
Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 113
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-10-23 04:04 PM

Very good poem,
:-)
-CM.

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2001-10-23 05:11 PM

I like this one... format is great as usual!

If you define cowardice as running away, tripping and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward.

hoppy
Member

since 2000-01-27

Posts 271

5 posted 2001-10-23 07:04 PM

LOW AND BEHOLD!!!! we finaly have a real poet on our hands! *L*

i did so enjoy that one! everyone take note of the genius in the ambigiuity

What is it you have to answer?
But to answer you have to ask?
And to ask you have to speak?
And to speak you have to know,
The answer.

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