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A Wish....... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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*just something fun  nothing more ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ With a wish upon a star to travel long to reach far she held her breath said a prayer Dear God in Heaven, it’s only fair I have so much I want to share on exhale she heard an angel sigh softly whisper I will try…… to grant your heart it’s tender request I will do my very best smiling now softly she replied to angel he is everything inside of me every dream every last desire every spark every fire he is the passion in each heart beat he is the source he is the heat burning fierce ~ inextinguishable need the ache that makes my quiet soul bleed with want that consumes any form of reason he is my only love my every season please, little angel if it could be I only wish he’d love me ~SEA~ [This message has been edited by SEA (edited 10-21-2001).] |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Okay, well, for 'just something fun, nothing more', this is a piece of WORK!!! I like this one so much! The flow, and rhythm, and yeah... I just really like it, is all!  If you define cowardice as running away, tripping and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
OMG!!! This is excellent Sea If only wishes really do come true  thanks for sharing keep em coming là où est mon amour? |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
if wishes did come true think of the fun we could have acire and dopes lol!!! great job miss lady person SEA! i'm just dumb!! i can't do nuthin right! |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
This is awesome!! Sad, but I can relate and I love it  ,Suga "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
This is really sweet, I like the message behind it. However, the occasional 3 syllable line sort of threw my reading flow off, but maybe that was just me personally. Hehe, anyway, good write. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
*thoughts rambles through his mind on what to say* ...........................wOW Susan , i LOVE it and relate fully...amazing piece(story and emotions, everything) again, i relate. thanks for sharing this with us and esp me. "This little light of mine...im gonna let it shine. *sighs* Let it shine...let it shine. Let it shine." |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
awwwwwwwwwwwwww sweet poem sue! thanks for this - i enjoyed it lots!  f t e |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I wish that I could write something like this just for fun I think this is BEAUTIFUL!!! I hope that you will share more of your work with us in Teen.If you want something very badly, set it free. If it comes back to you, its yours forever, if it doesnt, it was never yours to begin with" |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Wow Sea. You little so and so..lol. You know what my just for funs are? Morbid, horrible things. This is really nice. You're so good.  ~AF~ If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
well, wow  you guys are too great, thank you so much.....with all that you are... |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Susan, this is a wish that echoes in my heart too. I hope the angel hears us, and grants us this wish. _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was a great poem susan! It flowed so nicely Thanks for sharing this with us!yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Awsome poem I really love it! Lauren "I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind |
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TigerZ Member
since 2002-01-02
Posts 83Ontario, Canada |
umm....WOW!!! its all i can say...wow A life without love…is no life at all. |
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rubberband Junior Member
since 2002-01-04
Posts 26Will be half Swiss one day |
That is so sad.... I was about to cry... *sniff* |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Oh wow, Susan... this is beautiful! Now... if only wishes could come true like that for me... I loved the style of the poem. The short lines really made an easy read... this is wonderful. *click* Into my library... Enjoyed this... bunches --Marie 'Things are getting worse but I feel a lot better... and that's all that really matters to me.' |
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