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0 posted 2001-10-21 12:20 PM


*just something fun   nothing more  
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With a wish
upon a star
to travel long
to reach far
she held her breath
said a prayer
Dear God in Heaven,
it’s only fair
I have so much
I want to share
on exhale
she heard an angel sigh
softly whisper
I will try……
to grant your heart
it’s tender request
I will do
my very best
smiling now
softly she
replied to angel
he is everything
inside of me
every dream
every last desire
every spark
every fire
he is the passion
in each heart beat
he is the source
he is the heat
burning fierce ~
inextinguishable need
the ache that makes
my quiet soul bleed
with want that consumes
any form of reason
he is my only love
my every season
please, little angel
if it could be
I only wish
he’d love me


~SEA~

[This message has been edited by SEA (edited 10-21-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-10-21 12:28 PM


Okay, well, for 'just something fun, nothing more', this is a piece of WORK!!! I like this one so much! The flow, and rhythm, and yeah... I just really like it, is all!  

If you define cowardice as running away, tripping and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward.

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2 posted 2001-10-22 09:53 AM


OMG!!! This is excellent Sea
If only wishes really do come true  
thanks for sharing
keep em coming

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?


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3 posted 2001-10-22 10:03 AM


if wishes did come true think of the fun we could have acire and dopes lol!!! great job miss lady person SEA!

i'm just dumb!! i can't do nuthin right!

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4 posted 2001-10-22 04:17 PM


This is awesome!! Sad, but I can relate and I love it  

,
Suga

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

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5 posted 2001-10-22 04:47 PM


This is really sweet, I like the message behind it. However, the occasional 3 syllable line sort of threw my reading flow off, but maybe that was just me personally. Hehe, anyway, good write.
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6 posted 2001-10-22 04:54 PM


*thoughts rambles through his mind on what to say*

...........................wOW Susan ,

i LOVE it and relate fully...amazing piece(story and emotions, everything) again, i relate. thanks for sharing this with us and esp me.

"This little light of mine...im gonna let it shine. *sighs* Let it shine...let it shine. Let it shine."

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7 posted 2001-10-22 08:39 PM


awwwwwwwwwwwwww sweet poem sue! thanks for this - i enjoyed it lots!

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       wave           a     ...r    the emotions crash in the reef of life
                 w    e

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8 posted 2002-01-13 05:29 AM


I wish that I could write something like this just for fun I think this is BEAUTIFUL!!! I hope that you will share more of your work with us in Teen.

If you want something very badly, set it free. If it comes back to you, its yours forever, if it doesnt, it was never yours to begin with"

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9 posted 2002-01-13 09:03 AM


Wow Sea. You little so and so..lol.
You know what my just for funs are? Morbid, horrible things. This is really nice.

You're so good.

~AF~

If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life.

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10 posted 2002-01-13 10:55 AM


well, wow you guys are too great, thank you so much.....

with all that you are...
with all that you know...
love......

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11 posted 2002-01-13 11:58 AM


Susan, this is a wish that echoes in my heart too. I hope the angel hears us, and grants us this wish.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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12 posted 2002-01-13 12:27 PM


This was a great poem susan! It flowed so nicely Thanks for sharing this with us!

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

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13 posted 2002-01-13 05:20 PM


Awsome poem I really love it!
  Lauren

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14 posted 2002-01-13 09:45 PM


umm....WOW!!!  its all i can say...wow

A life without love…is no life at all.

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15 posted 2002-01-14 03:24 PM


That is so sad....  I was about to cry... *sniff*
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16 posted 2002-01-16 12:28 PM


Oh wow, Susan... this is beautiful!  Now... if only wishes could come true like that for me...

I loved the style of the poem.  The short lines really made an easy read... this is wonderful.  *click*  Into my library...

Enjoyed this... bunches

--Marie

'Things are getting worse but I feel a lot better... and that's all that really matters to me.'

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