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tzaddiqim
Junior Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 15


0 posted 2002-02-27 04:32 PM


Ok, so i'm not very good at this writign stuff, i write when i feel like it, when i ahve soemthign to say, and what i say doesn't always make sense, even to me. This is oen of theos poems, i wrote in in oh the last 5 mins, because i ahd to. Hope u can relate, maybe expalin it hehe


In this world what is it that we want?
What thing is important to us?

Do we want money?
But then are we not capitalist?
Do we want freedom?
But at what cost?

Do we want love?
To Love?
Or be loved?

Do we want success?
Or is that greed?
Do we want safety?
Are we ever safe?

In the world is there a time when we are truly happy; may one person say in their heart of hearts ‘I am happy’.

They are simple.
They are blessed.
They know no better.  

Is love the way?
When it causes so much pain.
Can I find salvation in the eyes of one who loves me?
I shall have to wait and see.

In this life,
I want love,
I want success,
I want freedom
Am I a bad person?


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LCBS
Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532
Connecticut
1 posted 2002-02-27 05:03 PM


I want, I want, I want.....

I want you to realize you are a great writer, and wanting isnt bad, just human nature....

Great Write


~LCBS

Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more...

TopGunLauren
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
2 posted 2002-02-27 05:55 PM


This is a really pwerful piece I really love it and you really are a good writter.Keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

"I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind

"You've got to get yourself together you got stuck in a moment and y

cherish
Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........
3 posted 2002-02-28 04:26 AM


so many questions...with very little to answer with. i liked the poem-it made me think about some of my own answers to the questions you posed. good piece- often the best poetry are ones straight from the heart

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

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