Teen Poetry #5 |
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Waiting for you" [first post since my "long", poetic absence from PIP] |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
The hands that once held this pencil Now clasp your hands within its Warmth, now embracing Skin to skin and Tone to tone. The pencil once wrote of a long lost Love, now erased, yet creased And embedded within the Soul of paper Constantly. And from that mark, made of graphite lost Burned paper within a single Flame of fire that Once was nothing Upon a wooden frame Ignited bright, Enflamed the sky. But now, ashes to ashes, dust to Dust, blown by the slightly Vacant wind of your Wandering breath, brushed by the Hands now clasped in mine, I hear your ethreal voice waft silently within the trees That listen as I longingly wait for you. + + + + + I'm back for a while. No, not a single existence of a visit. Perhaps twice that. ^^ I tried something new...run-on sentences everywhere, I know, but rather have punctuation and verse breaks everywhere, why not let you read it how you think it should be read? Give a little freedom, yes? I personally think that the run-on sentences gives it more fluid motion, rather than the other freeverse I [once] did. I also must apologize for my lack of...being. Existence isn't something handled easily. ^_^ One last thing before I pass out: I wouldn't mind getting to know some more people here at pip, so feel free to email me or im on msn, AIM [Minkaimadae], or ICQ. I'll be around. Enough of me. *checks watch*...*passes out* x_X ++ Leah ++ ps- if anyone has a suggestion for a title, it would be much appreciated. ^^ Thank ya. Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... [This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 10-12-2001).] |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Wow, I really like this one! You're right about the format... really works with this one! My email is [email protected] If you define cowardice as running away and screaming at the first sign of danger, then yes, Mister Brave Man, I guess I am a coward. |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
It's nice to see you posting again and its good to have u back?? Where did you go!? I missed reading ur poems, i always loved them. N e wayz im glad to see you posting again and once again ur poem was great! Nice job and keep em comin! |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
LOVEd this piece...the way its written which was very creative of you...the whole images and man, everything i totally enjoyed...and you dont have to wait, arent i right here?..HaHa. you take care, Sabine.. ![]() [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 10-12-2001).] |
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Knight of Secrecy Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 113San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very cool poem, I can relate to this, Well Done. |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
Beautiful Poem. I really enjoyed this one.. thanks for posting it ![]() Sarah (btw, welcome back!) *the chains which once held us are only the chains which we've made* |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Ah Leah, you never lose that touch of yours. ![]() I love this. I can connect with it quite a bit and you've done an excellent job on the imagery. Thanks for sharing. I look forward to more. ~AF~ "I remember the days when I was so eager to satisfy you" |
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Charisma![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Welcome back, and I like this piece, and I'm looking forward to read some more of you. Charisma |
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DancinQueen![]()
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Welcome back!! I know how those poetic absences go....had a few myself ![]() *dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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NathanS Member
since 2001-09-27
Posts 106CA |
THIS WAS ABSOLUTELY AWESOME!!! Great write!! ![]() Library!!!!! -Dreys |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Nice to have poetry like yours back. Yes, the run-on lines do suit this piece very nicely. It was a great read. ~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~ |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I've ran out of things to say ![]() You already know how I feel about it thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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