Teen Poetry #5 |
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9.11 [written on sept. 16/01] |
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quietlydying![]() ![]()
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz ![]() |
[9.11] At the hands of the merciless faint of heart we lay our blame, our sorrows, our blunders. Swept away in the wind is the sparkle in his eye, he dimple in her cheek and that crooked smile that no one could ignore. The meat of our fears [end of the line desperation] splatters the sidewalk. With her torch so bright she couldn't see the wasp at her temple? Poised, lowering his stinger ready to strike Again Again Again. Just another casualty of the synthetic comfort of our Ikea armchair. The JVC silverbox shining light on the sufferings of others. Too far away, that could never happen here. - jen so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
I know those feelings, that you described so well. |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Goodness, this is very good. The thing I liked about it, was you never really flat out told anyone what the subject was (the title is the exception). Anyone with a simple knowledge of history can relate this poem to any other tragedy that happened in America. Timeless making the title a little ironic. Of course that's just my opinion ![]() "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Wow...this is a powerful piece. Such strength behind your words makes it a brilliant piece. Some fantastic imagery in it too. Be proud. I enjoyed the read quite a bit. ![]() ~AF~ "Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination" |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
The following words are spoken by my dear friend Kerri ---> I don't write much poetry so I don't know that much but this was really good and i wish i could write like that It helps knowing that others have some of the same feeling about that tragedy as I do I thank u 4 that |
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Kevin![]()
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Fight Club Rocks! ![]() |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Nice write. I liked it! Looks like you put a lot into writing it. ![]() And ehhhh Kevin.....where the heck did you pull that out of?? "You've got to get yourself together, you got stuck in a moment, and you can't get out of it." |
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