A simple Smile (Uncertain Angel)

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aaron woodside
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since 2001-09-26

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0 posted 2001-09-26 06:55 PM

It's been awhile since I've posted anything on these boards.  Ya I've been lazy, this is the first poem I've written in about 4 months.  Anyway comments are appreciated.

A simple Smile (Uncertain Angel)

The uncertain angel sits
not to far across the room
soaring high above it all,
she remains sitting; Smiling
a hint of mischeivous,
devilish, stance
and kindess worthy of
heavenly, Cherubic trance,
The girl's smile does possess
and leaves me wondering
how it may feel to be
to have that simple Smile
Smiling at Me.

EHHHHHHHH, Me thinks I'm a bit rusty.  Anyway...

Ex Animo,
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SEA

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Member Seraphic

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with you

1 posted 2001-09-26 07:57 PM

Welcome.....

or is that welcome back?

either way, hi! and please check your email for a special greeting!

~SEA

anonymousfemale
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2 posted 2001-09-27 10:22 AM

Welcome back to Passions!!

Everyone is bound to be rusty when they first step back in. This has potential. I like it.

Make sure you keep sharing with us and thanks for posting this.

~AF~

"Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination"

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Member Patricius

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3 posted 2001-10-04 02:18 PM

Nicely done here. I enjoyed the poem and hope to see more from you.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Alyssa

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IM ENGAGED!!!!!

4 posted 2001-10-05 06:37 PM

hey sweety!
Loved the poem! I got like ahlf of yers in my personal library! hehe
Good job!

"If I made you mad today, would you still love me tomorrow?"-Incubus

Skyfire

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5 posted 2001-10-05 10:53 PM

I like this one, even if you do feel you're rusty! Belive me, it's good! Keep sharing!
Rhonda

Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind".

aaron woodside
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since 2001-09-26

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6 posted 2001-10-05 11:10 PM

Hey thnx everyone. Thnx Alyssa w/ two S's. LoL. Talk to ya later Amee.

Ex Animo,
Aaron

Angelwings
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7 posted 2001-10-06 12:40 PM

Hello friend~
   It's nice to have you here with the rest of us.  I hope you keep writing it's always a pleasure to read what you have to say.  (or hear it lol)!
   Good poem I hope things are going okay with her.

                  chelsea

If we're told we're bad, that's the only idea we'll ever have. Maybe if we are surrounded by beauty someday we will become what we see.

aaron woodside
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since 2001-09-26

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8 posted 2001-10-06 02:03 AM

Thnx Chelsea, glad to hear from ya. Gimme a call soon.

Later

Ex Animo,
Aaron

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

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swimming in fairy floss...........

9 posted 2001-10-07 11:52 PM

OOOOOO!! i liked this one a lot. its great for a first post after a break for so long! welcome back aaron

...thanks for sharing!

wouldnt it be wonderful if children werent scared of looking up at the sky?

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Member Rara Avis

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10 posted 2001-10-18 10:17 AM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! <--- a little late I know

Your first post is intriguing and definitely considered still as excellent. very impressive first post. Hope you enjoy this place as much as we all do. Happy posting and reading others work as well.

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xShUgArHiGhx

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11 posted 2001-10-18 10:21 AM

WELCOME BACK TO PASSIONS!!!!!

Nice to see that you came back to us

WHere ya been all this time ?? I love poems about angels and this is probably one of my favorite ones. Great job and its great to see you posting again, hope to see your poems around more often!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

FoxXena
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12 posted 2001-10-18 01:15 PM

Hey! Welcome back! Even though I've never known you!

~*~It is said that laughter is the shortest distance between two people...~*~
~*~I say it is the written word.~*~

quietlydying

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the wonderful land of oz

13 posted 2001-10-18 06:53 PM

i did enjoy the piece overall, but the one thing i didn't like too much was the paradox in the first few lines.

[she soars... remains sitting].

i know what you're getting it, but to me it just doesn't sound right.

oh well, that's just me, and poetry is purely self-expression, so it's what YOU like and how YOU feel.

but i do love the rest of the poem.

good job and thanks for a most wonderul read.

- jen

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

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