Teen Poetry #5 |
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Closing Thoughts |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
oh well it's just another post hope you enjoy ![]() Closing Thoughts: The days all full of wonder Times of love that shune Glimpse of a life A cry so far Falling stars and winds unravelled The mind goes free Smiling at the lights Happiness just overcomes me Yet the shyness All quiet thoughts to keep and dreams untold all just clear A caterpillar enclosed in itself Scared of it's own existance And also the rest of the world In it's head, it's just wishing to have for a first time A glimpse of a life Times of love that shune The days all full of wonder And the rest, all gone. ![]() I see the darkness coming all is bleak... |
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Jezziekaka Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 58where the trees touch the sky |
Crash&Burn~ I like this poem! I also liked those little guys! Jezzika be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise! |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
'ello ![]() This is a fairly good write. I liked the overall message in it and what you're actually writing about. That is well done. Actually, I can't see anything wrong with it at all. ![]() Thanks for the read. I did enjoy it very much. ![]() ~AF~ "Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination" |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done jorge. I liked the poem and wonder why it's only received 2 replies. Hope to hear from you soon. ![]() Tell Jonothan to call me. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I like it a lot! It's not "just another post", it's a work of art! ![]() Rhonda Mr T trusts me with coaching the Jr. Girls rugby team. What was he THINKING?!?!?! |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
thanx for posting guys, and yes dopey I wonder the same I thought this post was quite good and would get a few replies, oh well pip's been kinda slow lately. ANyways thanx for reading guys ![]() I see the darkness coming all is bleak... |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Simple but still astounding poem and yes, pip has been really slow lately I just hope it starts picking back up Thanks for the marvelous read keep em coming [This message has been edited by Anonymousfemale (edited 01-01-2000).] |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I enjoyed this a lot....good job and keep em comin! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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quietlydying![]() ![]()
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
'A caterpillar enclosed in itself Scared of it's own existance' i love that line more than you will ever know. it provokes the mind. wow. good job. - jen so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 |
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