Tears have no color but stain like blood

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CowgirlFreedom17
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since 2002-05-20

Posts 82
Mississippi

0 posted 2002-05-20 02:05 AM

They fall seemingly from the corners of my eyes.
Thick and hot, like blood.
Drowning the creases in my skin and delicately taking quick advantage of heartache.
Producing no color, they roll, forming various shapes, as of memories.
Then on the cheek, they fade, staining like blood, and leaving behind the bitter taste of pain.

Don't hold back the words you really mean.

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

1 posted 2002-05-20 11:16 PM

Hi Cowgirl,

i liked this a lot..the images are a bit disturbing though..like Rachel from the sitcom FRIENDS, i have a weird thing about eyes and i am uncomfortable thinking about the analogy of tears to blood...

CowgirlFreedom17
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since 2002-05-20

Posts 82
Mississippi

2 posted 2002-05-20 11:36 PM

FateRider,

Thanks. I understand what you mean about tears and blood. I have this attraction to peoples eyes though, I believe you can find truth and more in people's eyes.

Don't hold back the words you really mean.

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

3 posted 2002-05-22 08:13 AM

Cowgirl,

i agree

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

4 posted 2002-05-23 10:26 AM

Amazing write...nicely done

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

Dunphy
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since 2002-03-14

Posts 82
Massachusetts USA

5 posted 2002-05-24 01:36 PM

i inspire ur rhyme i lie it almost as good me as you can see i hope you come out more then one rhyme you know this tha place an a lotta time great write i do like i hope to read some more i hope it will be so very sure

from dunphy

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28

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Standing In Silence...

6 posted 2002-05-24 05:26 PM

wow, i liked this ...alot of hidden feelings behind it, i liked it good job~

~I dont miss him, I miss the person I thought he was....~

Dopey Dope

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since 2000-08-30

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San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2002-05-26 02:28 AM

Very profound piece of writing. I really liked it a lot. This is the first poem I read from you, and I'm going to go read more now.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Mon Cherie

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since 2001-10-31

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Land of Never-ending Summers

8 posted 2002-05-26 01:23 PM

I really love what you wrote here esp

"Producing no color, they roll, forming various shapes, as of memories."

I'd rather think that tears are like rivers and streams, carrying the heartbreak in it's riverbeds.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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