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-=Torn=- (FINISHED)
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-=Torn=- (FINISHED) |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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*done  -=Torn=- Conflicting emotions, crying pleas tears, they fall, but no one sees Broken promises and broken hearts mended wounds are torn apart Never-ending struggles, bitter tears crys, they call, but no one hears Shattered memories and shattered dreams life's not as easy as you thought it'd be Twisted recollections, tattered words a call for love that goes unheard Shredded confidence and shredded pride thrown around on life's wild ride Ridiculed beliefs, bothered thoughts a continuous battle remains unfought Ruined today and ruined forever as I struggle to put the pieces together **You can't always trust the people you want to** [This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 09-18-2001).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Oh man I can totally relate to that. "Shattered memories and shattered dreams life's not as easy as you thought it'd be" How very true.  I do like this one, Kiles. It read through really well and the overall feeling in it was pretty good. Thanks for the read. Enjoyed it a lot.  ~AF~ "Who needs enemies, |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Great poem so far I can relate to it I can't wait to read the rest.Keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
This was well done. Just nicely written! robin bye lizzy,javi,acire,cherish,SEA,vicky,laura, and anyone else i forgot i will be back to torment you soon muhahahahahahaha |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
ooo I liked this alot. Great job on it. Very strong piece. Its going into my library. tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
Very very nice very very! i like it alot! "Its a great day tobe alive, I know the suns still shinin when I close my eyes!" |
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Alysia182 Junior Member
since 2001-06-22
Posts 19CT |
I liked this one alot! I can relate to it so much. Very nicely writen. Some day, you will ache like I ache! ~Hole |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this piece brought the realistic part of me...SO very true...you have expressed it with powerful emotions...i liked it LOTS, Kiley.. if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry- |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I liked this one a whole lot. You did wonderfully on it, glad you've finished it. You steal all the thoughts right out of my head! Jenn "In the words of a broken heart, it's just emotion taking me over; you'll never see me fall apart, in the words of a broken heart." [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 09-19-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm very impressed with this one it's like you took more time on this More thoughts and feelings in it I'm just scared that this might be one of those poems You know, the not my life poems For some reason, you have the talent to imulate that really well thanks for sharing sweets keep it up hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Wow! I really liked this one. I can totally relate. It is very emotion filled. I love it. It's going in my library. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hey guys Thanks a ton..acire~ i know it..lol i write so much better when it has nothing to do with anything **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
awesome |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You really out did yourself here. I really liked it! Very very well done. One of my favs by you.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks dopes~means alot coming from you **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
Kiley!! This was truly amazing!!...the words flowed so beautifully, you are a gorgeous writer with much talent...you should always write your feelings out on paper because the come out so beautifully! I speak from my heart here, im sorry i missed this one! Keep it up the incredible work Yours Truly, Jeff P.S. If you ever need someone to talk to you, my arms are open for you, I will always be here for you to talk you I promise you that.~Jeff~ Hi Javi, Kiley, Acire, Carly, Susan, Jen, Marge, Nan, Ron, Kit, Allan, Marie, Alby, and everyone else in PIP!! [This message has been edited by JBaker515 (edited 09-24-2001).] |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Kiley girl!! This was such a good poem!! I really liked it! Im sorry to hear that your going through this though...you truely know how to put your feelings into words! ::hugs:: |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hey michi i think u need about 5 more stars to be complete **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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