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Broken Thoughts |
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Nathaniel Shain Junior Member
since 2001-06-03
Posts 35 |
Broken Thoughts I shall not wander in the mind. The dreams I have, I’ve yet to find. I will not delve in doubt and fear. I will not wilt or shed a tear. I’m dead inside from wounds unhealed. The tears inside my eyes have spilled. My heart is dusty lace that’s old. My sight grows dim, my breath is cold. I’ll never touch another night with broken thoughts that blend with light. I will not suffer from the past. The day will unfold when I’m free at last. I was brought down to my knees before. I now stand straight, but nothing more. I’m surrounded by a twilight day. I search but cannot find my way. I will not shelter in a dream, although I cannot ever seem to keep the wake in native fears, to stand steadfast through passing years. The eve, much like a gentle dawn, the twilight, like a day. My heart is full of twilight song. My mind is full of clay. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A beautiful entrance made, thank you for sharing this with our Passions' Poets! Welcome, and please, check your e-mail for a special message! Karilea |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Welcome!! Twilight can be lovely and new clay molded into a masterpiece. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
this poem is fascinating,i love it  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is a great poem! I love the depth of the material. Welcome to Passions!! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Very well done. Welcome to passions! There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Wow! awesome writing! *W*E*L*C*O*M*E* to Passions! ~Tier |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family!! This is marvelous. I will look for your work again.  |
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elizabeth anne Member
since 2001-03-29
Posts 83 |
Very interesting verse .. welcome to Passions.. Elizabeth Anne |
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Just A Man Junior Member
since 2001-06-02
Posts 15Pain |
Broken thoughts may be like broken hearts it is said time heals such for you I hope it does For myself, I have never found it to be such May it be for you. walk free "In daring to dream, offering life,I am sentenced to life as a Deadman walking. Such ends all Love given." [This message has been edited by Just A Man (edited 06-03-2001).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A great poem Well Done Welcome Maree |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Hang in there, Nathaniel. You will find your way when the time is right. It isn't an easy thing to do, but you'll get there. This was a grand entrance here. Great write. Welcome to Passions! I think you will fit right in. All writing comes |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I’m dead inside from wounds unhealed. The tears inside my eyes have spilled. My heart is dusty lace that’s old. My sight grows dim, my breath is cold. I’ll never touch another night with broken thoughts that blend with light. I will not suffer from the past. The day will unfold when I’m free at last. I was brought down to my knees before. I now stand straight, but nothing more. I’m surrounded by a twilight day. I search but cannot find my way. ==================================== Your cadence is excellent... and your emote and expression is intense... this is very well written, Welcome to Poetry Land ... nice to have you here. I look forward to reading more of your work. I'm not right ... you're not wrong ... |
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JamesBowie Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 252big old Bangor Maine up by the shack |
nice breakthrough piece. Glad to see the quality of poets coming here has not been diluted |
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Nathaniel Shain Junior Member
since 2001-06-03
Posts 35 |
Sunshine, Thank you and thanks also for the wonderful card. Julian, Thank you and yes, I agree. Watersign6, Thanks for "loving" this. I wasn't sure that I should post it and now I am glad that I did. ethome, Thank you for the welcome. I'm glad you like the depth. I enjoyed writing it. Jamie, Thanks. I think I'm going to like it here. Tier, I love hearing "wow" and "awesome." It gives a lot of confidence in my writing which right now, I could use. Thank you so much. Poet deVine, I really appreciate your comments. Thank you. Elizabeth Anne, Thank you for the welcome and reading. Just A Man, I hope it is for you also and I wish you my very best. Thank you for your kindness. Maree, Thank you very much. Lone Wolf, I know I'll find my way and thank you for reading. Janet Marie, Thank you. I was taught by one of the best, so I hope not to disappoint her. James Bowie, What a nice thing to say. Thank you much. Everyone, thank you very much for making me feel so welcome here and for reading my poem. Nathaniel |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Welcome to Passions. I enjoyed the read and look forward to future works. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Nathaniel...what a wonderful first write..deep and powerful...Welcome to Passions! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
welcome to passions enjoy |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Nathaniel, Wow wonderful writing here hope to see more of your work and welcome to Passions hope you enjoy your stay. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Nicely done! |
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