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They Fell Before The Fall
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They Fell Before The Fall |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia 
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They Fell Before The Fall They knew warm moments in their hearts just as the season was For summer blessed the air they had breathed The breeze it sang a lullaby across those evening skies As nature slowly painted nighttime's scenes... The summer was just the beginning of a whole new world Lines of loneliness seemed to erase from their face For two souls who felt so new to the golden light upon them Finally walked a mile at a runners pace... It all happened as the moon became the source of inner peace For beneath it they found a greater way in life But, in their hearts were the silhouettes of the loved ones left behind Still they just weren't sorry they shared the night... Oh, it was kind and so loving to both their touch For the most of that season and through each rising sun But, before long the winds would become colder again And, the warm summer nights would soon be gone... So, the cooler winds began sending words they didn't mean Who thought the chill would ever effect their hearts They built their dreams in each other and shared the warmth But, the cold bitter rain just pushed them apart... The fall was just a beginning to a whole new world Lines of loneliness seemed to appear on their face For two souls who couldn't stand the darkness upon them Barely made it a mile at a runner's pace... Just a destination to love with autumn in sight They never held one another again at all Though they loved and will love until death takes their hands Like drifting leaves they fell before the fall... Saun Sauni :) |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh,SweetSaunni~ You write the 'sad' so beautifully. 'Though they loved and will love until death takes their hands Like drifting leaves they fell before the fall...' Such tender thoughts cascade across my heart with these lines. Thank you ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh, it was kind and so loving to both their touch For the most of that season and through each rising sun But, before long the winds would become colder again And, the warm summer nights would soon be gone... =============================== I knew i was going to love this one just from the title... beautiful bittersweet write... lovely imagery and as always... your gift of cadence well done poetess Im searchin for my warrior |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Thank you Marge and Janet for responding. I do write of sad things and situations alot and I guess that is because there are so many sad situations in my life...but if it weren't for writing I don't know what I'd do.  Sauni Sauni :) |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
It will take more than a season to seperate a love such as this...time and weather changing will wait for you both. There will always be another summer! |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Not to bump you, but I forgot to say, did you see the post Sven wrote about you in his gallery? If not, may want to search back a few days. |
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confetti Junior Member
since 2001-04-12
Posts 33 |
I really like the title and the way you worked it into your poem. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
JLR, Confetti, thank you both also for responding. I enjoy this site so much. No, JLR, I didn't know of Sven's writing, but I found it! Thank you. Sauni Sauni :) |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
this was very enjoyable even though it is sad you write it so well |
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