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The Devil's Cigarette
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The Devil's Cigarette |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Lonely, the sun appears to burn up the horizon The woodlands awake whispering to long golden fingers There the day grows upwards songs whistle and greet as aged tenants all stretch. A charred stand of perennial woodys connects to the lush green. I'm speechless at the ravage of this exposed man made cemetery. I long for quick solutions a means sponsered by all aware of costs, a stretch of time, caught and held back for repair. I move my eyes from forest floor to burned soldiers cursing the poles left to grow out of the black. The birds, the moose, the bear, all souls, running, frightened until... The hot flames of the devil go dead, with scattered wildlife and blood at the end of a cigarette! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to re-language historie [This message has been edited by ethome (edited 06-02-2001).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
One more reason to stop smoking, eh what? You painted an excellent black and white portrait. Well done. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I'm speechless at the ravage of this exposed man made cemetery. I long for quick solutions a means sponsered by all aware of costs, a stretch of time, caught and held back for repair. Some dark well written imagery here Ethome, Enjoyed the read. I wonder which brand OLd Nick smokes? "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent write Ethome ... intense and perfectly laid out. It's a horrible result of a momentary thoughtless gesture ... your outrage is very clear in this piece, and I echo your sentiments, well done.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
very nice, ethome. To any who have not seen nor fought such flames, you have left a wonderful (if that be the word)image so they could know |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...James |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome..YOU are the one that writes with a poet's heart...your images in this are wonderful..it does hurt to see the pain that one careless act produces...thanks for this poem. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Outstanding portrayal here. Very well done, with a strong message, hopefully taken by many. Sandra |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
superb my friend. . . these images are excellent and you convey the thoughts perfectly. . . ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ Stunning deep imagery ... As one who has recently been touched by the fates of fire ... I appreciate this one tremendously. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 06-02-2001).] |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
deep an intense,i enjoyed this |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ethome, my poet friend...I put off reading this for emotional reasons... even though it is not what I thought it might be about... nevertheless, it is still emotional... rarely do I say this....but.... damn.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The hot flames of the devil go dead, with scattered wildlife and blood at the end of a cigarette! =================================== SLAP!!! (the sound of the impact of reality) vivid, stark, intense, and righteous. may I ditto Suns superb superlative  your so cool E-babes. Im searchin for my warrior |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You are just outstanding...awesome write here darlin.... |
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angelbear Member
since 2001-05-22
Posts 139North East, USA |
Oh the power, pain, and devestation caused by addction....Great work. I can't control |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A an excellent write and certainly the time of year for this warning, such senseless loss and threat to our environment, it sickens me. I share your disgust. ~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them ~*~ |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
I smoke about half a pack a day (give or take) and i am good friends with a hopeless addict of many things... i feel this.. everytime i go in the backyard and have a ciggarette, i feel this |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
One careless gesture and a forest burns. Good depth in writing this for us. Remind us always of safety. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Interloper. I guess it's a good reason to quit among others. Thanks Brian I'm glad you could get the chance to read this! Hi Kit always good to hear from you and you're right it is a momentary thoughtless geature.......thanks. Logan if no one that reads this ever fights one of those fires they all will still feel the results of them....thanks! Thanks James I appreciate the comment! Martie thanks for the heart of a poet remark it sure means a lot to me. Sven thanks for taking the time to read the message. Catalinamoon I sure hope a strong message gets out to the world by whatever means possible....thanks! Marge you know what the results are like after a devestating fire and it's not pretty...thanks Marge! Watersign6 thank you for the kind words! Sunshine I can imagine what you were thinking but I'm glad you dropped in to read and I thank you! Janet my dear poet friend I thank you for all the intense adjectives and your reality comments! Paula my dear sweet poet lady I thank you for your thoughts. Angelbear I know what you mean and the addiction always seems to cause trouble one way or another......thanks! Thank you Mysteria! I know that you know as well as I do that this is a terrible happening when a forest is destroyed! EagleScorpion watch those lungs but if you are going to smoke keep the butts away from the tinder dry forests! Thanks for the reply. Yes Julian that's all it takes is a careless mistake and we lose thousands of acres of our enviroment! Thanks for your thoughts. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Love the title...appreciated the message greatly! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks for dropping in for the read JLR! |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Ethome, Most powerful message in this master piece of poetry and the imagery superb, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Cerenity for the kind comment I really appreciate it! |
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JCGF Member
since 2001-01-19
Posts 72MA |
Powerful! This hit me like a ton of bricks! Wow! Great write. Thankyou for the read. Tammy |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Tammy thank you for the wonderful positive comment, much appreciated! |
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