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Open Poetry #14

poem - almost scared

PoemCrazy
Member

since 2000-11-30

Posts 159

0 posted 2001-06-02 02:53 AM

you're the only reason i turn this thing on

does that scare you?

i enter a different world,
where i'm blind
and deaf.

to find you.

where are the monsters?
i hear only disjointed voices,
who speak in a broken language.

i might know fear,
if they could do anything

besides

make noise.

SilentSongs
Junior Member

since 2001-05-31

Posts 43
Mist of Time

1 posted 2001-06-02 05:08 AM

Indeed the world withina world
where the blind speak in unique
descriptions of what the mute speak

awash in contradictions
on a small blue screen monsters
are there for the making amidst
the silent screams of simply being

"The past my prison, confined in solitary voiceless penance."

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

2 posted 2001-06-02 05:31 AM

I like it!

Just a preference...I think capital I's would make the whole thing easier to read as opposed to the small i's you have used..

great poem...

It is to do with tree-ferns:
mamuka, pongo, wheki.
Shelter under here is so easily understood.
From 'Hope', by Dinah Hawkins

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2001-06-02 07:11 AM

Great poem!

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